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6/30/2016 c1 zinnianana
awsome :)
5/11/2016 c1 8LorrahBear
I think it could be more powerful if you found a way to use two different words for M instead of moonlight twice, and maybe either "ah" or "oh" instead of both. With so few lines available in this type of poem, it's important to make full use of what you've got. :)

Overall, well done!

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