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12/12/2016 c11 16anonymousvoice
Actually I like how you wrote this chapter. If you would've broken it up it probably would've been too much angst but with how you ended it with humor was perfect for it. Melody also makes a lot more sense tk me now. I knew she was a weird character, but usually people are that was for a reason and now it makes so much more sense! I'm heading into finals week too and am also procrastinating lol. Good luck!
12/11/2016 c11 TheVelvetQueen
Yayyy finally got snippets of their past. Everything makes sense now. I know I've said this before but I just can't get over how cute Melody is. And Orion really needs to start watching New girl, he's missing out lol. Anyways can't wait for the next chapter. :)
12/10/2016 c11 Guest
Damn he's falling for her real hard and fast.
Totally love your story. Keep up the good work! :-)
12/7/2016 c10 TheVelvetQueen
Daannggg even I felt that kiss. I absolutely love Melody and her rants and her logical processes. It's true no one really does talk about santa's STALKER obsession. Her character is well developed and unique. But I'm so frustrated and annoyed by Orion, acting as though the kiss didn't affect him...(puh lease) So you did a great way of making his words say one thing but his actions display another. I really love this story so please just keep writing and doing what you're doing.
12/7/2016 c10 snazzyunicorn
OK, I know I reviewed just a few days ago, but then a new chapter came out, and I have three words: I AM SHOOK. I was BALD by the end of the chapter, that's how good it was.

To add, that kiss scene was freaking h o t. As I kept reading, I was thinking, "Shit, this story about to turn from T to M." LMAAOOOO

And as usual, I read through the chapter at lightning speed and at the end, I was practically yelling, "What do you mean that's it? Where's the rest of it?"

And honestly, I love when authors give us foreshadowing like that, it keeps readers on edge to find out what leads up to that, so thank you, because it all makes sense now as to why Orion felt like a jackass at the beginning of chapter nine.

Thank you, also, for not being a problematic writer. You make the characters feel alive, that they have depth and meaning to their personalities, and their unique mannerisms aren't just traits you can copy from one character to the next. Golden, I tell you.

I mean, honestly, I haven't been this eager about a fic in a long time, and this one just really has me hooked. The chemistry between the two is unbelievable, it's different from other innocent/geeky girl bad boy stories, but this one stands out among the rest, and you just gotta read it to see what I mean.

I'm very excited for more chapters, but good luck with finals/papers/projects!
12/6/2016 c10 Aravar
I just started reading this fanfic tonight and I read all 10 chapters and omg you are SUCH a great writer. Like, most fanfics are written terribly and it's SO hard to find one that's written at a good pace with good characterization and original funny stuff, and omg yo are amazing... I love Melody so much and I love allll of these characters and DUDE CHAPTEE 10 IS PERFECT DONT CHANGE ITTTTTTT It's BEAUTIFUL. Yessss, he went too far this time, and it's good to get this in because she isn't a pushover, she's a shy love love loveee this story, pleaseeeee updated for chapters after your finals lol can't wait to see what happens next!
12/5/2016 c10 anonymousvoice
I actually quite liked this chapter. It seemed like something Orion would impulsively do - even though I don't like how we only get to see his "indifference" and dismissal when I believe his thoughts are definitely different than what he's letting on.
11/29/2016 c9 snazzyunicorn
BRUH. This is the best fic I've read in ages. I love the characters and I could not stop reading. I kept going and by the time I knew it, I was murmuring, "Fuck, I'm almost done." I'm so excited for upcoming chapters! Thanks for doing such a great job and I look forward to more developments between Melody and Orion!
11/28/2016 c6 Mercyrus
DUDE! Bahahahaha!

that was the funniest thing I have read in a LONG time! LMFAO

on to the next chapter!
11/27/2016 c9 Lili
Omg! Loved it! So excited for the next chapter!
11/27/2016 c9 TheVelvetQueen
Awww I wish I could play pool like Melody or just be good at any sport in general. And I have to admit I was really looking forward to that archery scene, darn. Lol but I liked how you showed the effect Melody had on Henry, it's so cute. Siiiighhh now I have to live my life without reading about their adventurous dares :(
11/23/2016 c8 TheVelvetQueen
This book is super cute. I absolutely love and adore it. Melody is so relatable, well to me at least. I love that you gave her such distinct character traits like her and her multiple cat sweaters, her pirate voices and even her love for her peanut butter covered pickle (although I personally wouldn't swoon over it). It makes her character alive and human. I also like how you managed to make her innocent and still very courageous, witty and smart. I would love to be her best friend. I'm curious to learn more about Orion though. I know there's much more that meets the surface. Like what do his tattoos mean, what kind of past he's lived through, who exactly is this Dirk guy and what was the point of coming to school if he's just going to skip classes and why doesn't his parents care or was he adopted? I'm sure you've already planned to reveal all of this this, sorry if I'm being so eager. I love how the names instantly portray their character. Bianca is such a basic mean girl.. (I just realized how mean that sounded so I sincerely apologize to the genuinely nice Bianca's out there... I'm sorry..). But Orion sounds like such a pompous ass so I especially like that you made Melody call him Henry, which is such a sweet name. It shows the contrast between how he acts with others and how he's actually sweet and considerate when he's with her. Although, I do hope to see an unfurling event that draws them both out of their element so that the book doesn't become only about their struggle with the dares. Overall, I really like it and I think it's so cute. Their banter and her rants make me laugh and smile all the time. I hope it won't be too long till the next chapter... Wow this was long... sorry this is so long winded and jumbled :(... but please update soon... enjoy your day :)
11/21/2016 c8 Giselle
Nice characterisation, keep it up. More please.
11/21/2016 c8 1hannahward
Ha ha, I find it really funny that he did the dare, but I don't think he could really not do it or he'd lose face. Keep up the good work :)
11/20/2016 c8 Lili
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