for The Magician's Fall7/13/2016 c1 
8Barbados
Well, that escalated quickly, and I did not see it coming.
Umm... so, really great piece, actually.
Couple small typos I spotted, but they weren't glaring and and didn't pull me out, so I've forgotten where they are - except for one near the end, when the magician leaps forward, you say she instead of he in the last line of that paragraph. Normally I'd provide the exact sentence, but any readers who read the review first would have the ending spoiled by that, and in this story that just would not do.
:)
8BarbadosWell, that escalated quickly, and I did not see it coming.
Umm... so, really great piece, actually.
Couple small typos I spotted, but they weren't glaring and and didn't pull me out, so I've forgotten where they are - except for one near the end, when the magician leaps forward, you say she instead of he in the last line of that paragraph. Normally I'd provide the exact sentence, but any readers who read the review first would have the ending spoiled by that, and in this story that just would not do.
:)