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8/3/2016 c1 SweetyKinz
So before I read this, I looked up the song and I was like, "what the frick is this?" but I already forgot what the song was about because I literally couldn't understand a word of it DX

But onto the fantastic one-shot, I just don't understand... It could because I, personally, haven't reached the point in my writing my writing that I'm really proud of, but I'm just so amazed over how much detail you put into this~ And it isn't really just the detail in particular that I'm fascinated by, but how you put them together in ways that I can only dream of *.* There a bunch of examples of this throughout, one being, "Instead, they were replaced with the gentle sound of waves spilling over a pale, sandy beach, and gulls crying forlornly high above his form." I don't know if sentences like that might not seem like such a big deal to you, or whatever, but they really just make me stop and think because of just how perfection is defined in that little essence of sentence xD This is what I was confused about, genuinely. How is that it's possible for you to piece this wondrousness (which is not a word, but who cares) together? It makes me cry because of how good of a writer you are. Seriously xD

Honestly, beaches are kind of gross, but the Caribbean has such pretty beaches~ Like in the Bahamas, the water is just so unbelievably blue compared to the beaches that we have here xD And I think that it fits with people's image because when they think of vacation, they think of a really beautiful beach that's warm and soft and you can relax, YET WHEN YOU GO TO AN ACTUAL BEACH, THERE IS NONE OF THAT! It's cold, gritty, and disgusting, and you get sand EVERYWHERE!

This is the image of a perfect beach, though, and makes you forget that and just wanna go to a beach xD And then when you're there you go, "Why am I here again? ..Oh, right. Kodi's one-shot was just so relaxing that I blinked and all of sudden, I was the beach!" (I don't know what I'm talking about either, it's okay.)

What's up with the girl, though? xD This sounds like it can be a post card, with them just dancing along the beach side and then they add a fake sunset and put obnoxious, giant words displaying the city. (Now I'm talking about post cards? Wut xD) Speaking of postcards, I have a bunch of specialized ones with Deadpool on them xD

I really like how the whole thing flows and then ties together in the end. Like, how you have it saying that, "It seemed as if all of creation wished to be with the pale-haired beauty. There was only one thing that remained unmoved and unwavering." And then the last sentence goes into it, and I think that was a perfect way to end it~

You are just awesomeness, my little Mushu x3

NOW FOR MY DRAMATIC EXIT!

I LOVE YOU AND I BELIEVE IN YOU SO KEEP DREAMING YOUR DREAMS AND GOING ON LIKE THIS AND YOU WILL ASPIRE TO GREATNESS! (THIS IS KINZY, SIGNING OFF!)

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