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wanted to take a moment to share my thoughts on your story, I loved it! The way it has been written so creatively makes it truly enjoyable and engaging. As a comic artist, I feel that this story has great potential to be converted into a comic. I believe audiences would love it if adapted into that format!
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Best regards,
Sunny.
wanted to take a moment to share my thoughts on your story, I loved it! The way it has been written so creatively makes it truly enjoyable and engaging. As a comic artist, I feel that this story has great potential to be converted into a comic. I believe audiences would love it if adapted into that format!
Contact info:
Discord: itsgametech
Email:
Best regards,
Sunny.
3/19/2017 c4 
1Tomoyuki Tanaka
I think your story is great, but I doubt you'll talk to me even if I say something about your story. I'm not worth the effort to talk to, after all.
Hmm...well, I guess the politics are rearing their ugly heads in this chapter with the councillors and stuff already searching for responsibility and making a show of things. Yeah, that was overkill, and a recipe for disaster. Oh well. At least they survived the damned nukes, but still...don't give your enemies such a big target to shoot at in the first place.
This is why politicians should never be allowed to dictate how wars are fought.
Poor Rin is confused about what's happening, but she's sharp enough to figure out what's going on, it seems. I wonder how she'll react when she discovers the atrocities her future self commits. This will be gold. I can't wait to see more, but considering there are more than 6 months since you last updated this story, I guess I shouldn't breathe easy. Oh well. One can hope though, right?
1Tomoyuki TanakaI think your story is great, but I doubt you'll talk to me even if I say something about your story. I'm not worth the effort to talk to, after all.
Hmm...well, I guess the politics are rearing their ugly heads in this chapter with the councillors and stuff already searching for responsibility and making a show of things. Yeah, that was overkill, and a recipe for disaster. Oh well. At least they survived the damned nukes, but still...don't give your enemies such a big target to shoot at in the first place.
This is why politicians should never be allowed to dictate how wars are fought.
Poor Rin is confused about what's happening, but she's sharp enough to figure out what's going on, it seems. I wonder how she'll react when she discovers the atrocities her future self commits. This will be gold. I can't wait to see more, but considering there are more than 6 months since you last updated this story, I guess I shouldn't breathe easy. Oh well. One can hope though, right?
3/19/2017 c3 Tomoyuki Tanaka
It's great. I didn't notice the title being a double entendre, nor did I get the triple entendre bit. Oh well. But the story is great so far. It doesn't beat around the bush or get lost in too much dialogue, and there's quite a bit of action. Missiles! Gunfights! Soldiers storming the palace! Destroyer under attack! Yeah, this is much better than Jun's Magi-polis which doesn't seem to have any magi 9 chapters into the story, whereas here 3 chapters in and we're already dodging an atomic missile that explodes into a cloud of a middle finger. Ha ha ha ha ha!
I have to say, that last part was pretty intense. Rin is stll as cute as ever, hard to believe she'll turn into a tyrannical empress, which makes it all the more curious as how she ended up becoming one. I can't wait to read more!
It's great. I didn't notice the title being a double entendre, nor did I get the triple entendre bit. Oh well. But the story is great so far. It doesn't beat around the bush or get lost in too much dialogue, and there's quite a bit of action. Missiles! Gunfights! Soldiers storming the palace! Destroyer under attack! Yeah, this is much better than Jun's Magi-polis which doesn't seem to have any magi 9 chapters into the story, whereas here 3 chapters in and we're already dodging an atomic missile that explodes into a cloud of a middle finger. Ha ha ha ha ha!
I have to say, that last part was pretty intense. Rin is stll as cute as ever, hard to believe she'll turn into a tyrannical empress, which makes it all the more curious as how she ended up becoming one. I can't wait to read more!
3/19/2017 c2 Tomoyuki Tanaka
I agree with your very good friend. Your stories are worth picking up and finishing. This looks great and I really got hooked onto it. I want more of Rin-chan! Ha ha ha ha! This is awesome!
Even better, Rin doesn't seem like any ordinary girl, what with those complex deep layers and prodigious magic. At least she's not a godlike Mary Sue who can conquer worlds at fourteen, but she doesn't seem like some helpless naive idiot who will get swept away with the flow either. Two thumbs up!
The moral dilemma Eterna is facing is hilarious, and I actually feel sorry for her. This will be good. I can't wait to see the trial, if it ever gets written. The whole case will literally get thrown out of court, if the legal system works similarly to our world's. This will be great! Looking forward to the next chapter!
I agree with your very good friend. Your stories are worth picking up and finishing. This looks great and I really got hooked onto it. I want more of Rin-chan! Ha ha ha ha! This is awesome!
Even better, Rin doesn't seem like any ordinary girl, what with those complex deep layers and prodigious magic. At least she's not a godlike Mary Sue who can conquer worlds at fourteen, but she doesn't seem like some helpless naive idiot who will get swept away with the flow either. Two thumbs up!
The moral dilemma Eterna is facing is hilarious, and I actually feel sorry for her. This will be good. I can't wait to see the trial, if it ever gets written. The whole case will literally get thrown out of court, if the legal system works similarly to our world's. This will be great! Looking forward to the next chapter!
3/19/2017 c1 Tomoyuki Tanaka
Oh wow. Well, I already expected that ending, considering it was clearly written in the synopsis. Ha ha. But the betrayal was unexpected. I was half-expecting Rinyaka to lose the battle, but she was actually guiding her forces to victory only to be betrayed at the end.
Still, despite the trappings of the synopsis, you did well in providing an excellent twist. While reading, I was wondering when Rinyaka would fall, but I didn't predict that Eterna would betray her. We can't all have heroes showing up to defeat the demon lords now because that would be too cliched, ha ha.
It's a very interesting premise and I look forward to reading more.
Oh wow. Well, I already expected that ending, considering it was clearly written in the synopsis. Ha ha. But the betrayal was unexpected. I was half-expecting Rinyaka to lose the battle, but she was actually guiding her forces to victory only to be betrayed at the end.
Still, despite the trappings of the synopsis, you did well in providing an excellent twist. While reading, I was wondering when Rinyaka would fall, but I didn't predict that Eterna would betray her. We can't all have heroes showing up to defeat the demon lords now because that would be too cliched, ha ha.
It's a very interesting premise and I look forward to reading more.
9/4/2016 c3 1Calvin Night
It's a neat concept and I look forward to see where you're going with this. I'm hoping for whatever reason Eterna ends up guidin/teaching Rin but also struggles woth seeing signs of her former mentor in the kid. It would also be interesting to see their backstories with how they grew up and each others' previous interactions
1Calvin NightIt's a neat concept and I look forward to see where you're going with this. I'm hoping for whatever reason Eterna ends up guidin/teaching Rin but also struggles woth seeing signs of her former mentor in the kid. It would also be interesting to see their backstories with how they grew up and each others' previous interactions