for Saccharine Secrets8/13/2017 c55 
50KH777
This is a great story! I really enjoyed reading it and the ending was just perfect. :D
50KH777This is a great story! I really enjoyed reading it and the ending was just perfect. :D
1/21/2017 c55 3wintersnowmelody
Wow. Just wow. First of all, I'd like to congratulate you for actually finding the commitment to finish an entire book. The ending of this book leaves me with a really indescribable emotion. There's a good sense of closure, which is great, but at the same time, I really don't want it to end. But that's how all the best endings are I guess. I guess that you could call this a happy ending. The last sentence was amazing. It perfectly illustrated the society they had lived in and it summarized kinda the entire 55 chapters in like 15 words. To me, though, the happy ending was actually more sad than happy. Far off in the distance, a castle is burned, and along with it, a hoard of memories and hopes and dreams, practically Amser's entire life. After that, some other group, most likely one led by Mrs. Chamomile, will take over and try changing the form of government, which in the end, will most likely fail. It really highlights the fact that no matter how hard humans try to create a perfect government, they can't. They've always failed. They've never been successful in keeping all of their promises. History sadly repeats itself over and over again, and some time in the future, some other poor person will rise up trying to fix these problems and they too will fail. Even further in the distance is a group of starving people and a pile of dead bodies growing bigger every day, and now I've finally accepted the fact that no one is going to help them. Eventually they will rot away into nothing, into extinction, and the stacks of illegal books and the fire burning them will rise higher and higher. Someday in the future a textbook lying in the ashes will be discovered by one of the last people living in this ruined place, and by then, even with the bloody secrets beyond the saccharine cover exposed, everything will be too late. In the midst of all this, Thorn will live looking at a girl who will never notice him, and will never be mistaken as his twin brother ever again. Francis will go on painting and hating his mother, though by now she has probably been killed. Gavin and Amser will live happily with each other but be forever plagued by the idea that they failed. And on top of each blood filled ground a new glossy layer of sugar will be spread, and the layers, growing taller with each new coating of sugar and innocent blood, will rise until the number of secrets are too much for any more sweetening, and eventually society itself will be no more. Eventually, everything will repeat itself. Eventually everyone will die. Besides the typos, this was a book I thoroughly enjoyed, and I'm so sad it's over. I hope you keep writing, I'm excited to read about pirates, except that you're a very visual writer so I'm not looking forward to reading about blood and gore but anyways. Thank you for this bitter allegory in my saccharine life.
Phew, I think that was the longest review I've written for anything.
3wintersnowmelodyWow. Just wow. First of all, I'd like to congratulate you for actually finding the commitment to finish an entire book. The ending of this book leaves me with a really indescribable emotion. There's a good sense of closure, which is great, but at the same time, I really don't want it to end. But that's how all the best endings are I guess. I guess that you could call this a happy ending. The last sentence was amazing. It perfectly illustrated the society they had lived in and it summarized kinda the entire 55 chapters in like 15 words. To me, though, the happy ending was actually more sad than happy. Far off in the distance, a castle is burned, and along with it, a hoard of memories and hopes and dreams, practically Amser's entire life. After that, some other group, most likely one led by Mrs. Chamomile, will take over and try changing the form of government, which in the end, will most likely fail. It really highlights the fact that no matter how hard humans try to create a perfect government, they can't. They've always failed. They've never been successful in keeping all of their promises. History sadly repeats itself over and over again, and some time in the future, some other poor person will rise up trying to fix these problems and they too will fail. Even further in the distance is a group of starving people and a pile of dead bodies growing bigger every day, and now I've finally accepted the fact that no one is going to help them. Eventually they will rot away into nothing, into extinction, and the stacks of illegal books and the fire burning them will rise higher and higher. Someday in the future a textbook lying in the ashes will be discovered by one of the last people living in this ruined place, and by then, even with the bloody secrets beyond the saccharine cover exposed, everything will be too late. In the midst of all this, Thorn will live looking at a girl who will never notice him, and will never be mistaken as his twin brother ever again. Francis will go on painting and hating his mother, though by now she has probably been killed. Gavin and Amser will live happily with each other but be forever plagued by the idea that they failed. And on top of each blood filled ground a new glossy layer of sugar will be spread, and the layers, growing taller with each new coating of sugar and innocent blood, will rise until the number of secrets are too much for any more sweetening, and eventually society itself will be no more. Eventually, everything will repeat itself. Eventually everyone will die. Besides the typos, this was a book I thoroughly enjoyed, and I'm so sad it's over. I hope you keep writing, I'm excited to read about pirates, except that you're a very visual writer so I'm not looking forward to reading about blood and gore but anyways. Thank you for this bitter allegory in my saccharine life.
Phew, I think that was the longest review I've written for anything.
1/21/2017 c54 wintersnowmelody
Awww, Amser would have fallen apart and died if it hadn't been for Gavin. But still, I get it that they're all good and free now, but still. What about the Deadlanders?
Awww, Amser would have fallen apart and died if it hadn't been for Gavin. But still, I get it that they're all good and free now, but still. What about the Deadlanders?
1/21/2017 c53 wintersnowmelody
XD "Both of your hands are okay!" I wonder whose hand Claude used to show Amser. And how are they going to help the Deadlanders now? Is that problem going to be unresolved in this book?
XD "Both of your hands are okay!" I wonder whose hand Claude used to show Amser. And how are they going to help the Deadlanders now? Is that problem going to be unresolved in this book?
1/19/2017 c51 wintersnowmelody
I actually expected Thorn to come back. After all he was the only one that wasn't dead yet. But yay! *shrieks with delight* Francis ISN'T DEAD! Unless she imagined the whole thing. I will be very angry if it turns out she did. But this doesn't make up for everyone else that ended up dying in this story. (Well, except Claude.) Because I liked Pierce way better than Thorn, and even though it is VERY hard to choose between Gavin and Francis, Gavin wins because he is everything I am not, and besides, even if I did like Francis better, you still killed Keiji in the beginning of the book, soooo...
I actually expected Thorn to come back. After all he was the only one that wasn't dead yet. But yay! *shrieks with delight* Francis ISN'T DEAD! Unless she imagined the whole thing. I will be very angry if it turns out she did. But this doesn't make up for everyone else that ended up dying in this story. (Well, except Claude.) Because I liked Pierce way better than Thorn, and even though it is VERY hard to choose between Gavin and Francis, Gavin wins because he is everything I am not, and besides, even if I did like Francis better, you still killed Keiji in the beginning of the book, soooo...
1/18/2017 c50 wintersnowmelody
What?! No! What?! No. I refuse to accept everything that has happened in the last couple chapters. This whole time I was blaming Mrs. Chamomile's substitute, when the whole time I should have been blaming the old lady herself. I can't take any more of these plot twists. How do you plan to resolve all these conflicts? Unless the Deadlanders step in and decide to save Amser, but I think that's unlikely. They're skeletons!
What?! No! What?! No. I refuse to accept everything that has happened in the last couple chapters. This whole time I was blaming Mrs. Chamomile's substitute, when the whole time I should have been blaming the old lady herself. I can't take any more of these plot twists. How do you plan to resolve all these conflicts? Unless the Deadlanders step in and decide to save Amser, but I think that's unlikely. They're skeletons!
1/18/2017 c46 wintersnowmelody
Oh wow. Her symptoms are getting worse. Wait! What if the teenager serving her tea is putting something in there to make her mental insecurity worse?! Sigh... maybe this is just evidence that I watch too many dramas.
Oh wow. Her symptoms are getting worse. Wait! What if the teenager serving her tea is putting something in there to make her mental insecurity worse?! Sigh... maybe this is just evidence that I watch too many dramas.
1/13/2017 c45 wintersnowmelody
Geez, Amser has problems and I don't know how you're going to resolve everything in 10 chapters but good luck to you. Gavin and Amser are so cute together but I'm not really able to focus on that right now because I still can't get over Francis's death. And you have many many typos, but that's something I'm willing to overlook because the storyline is interesting. 10 more chapters to go! (Although I thought there would be 15 chapters left.)
Geez, Amser has problems and I don't know how you're going to resolve everything in 10 chapters but good luck to you. Gavin and Amser are so cute together but I'm not really able to focus on that right now because I still can't get over Francis's death. And you have many many typos, but that's something I'm willing to overlook because the storyline is interesting. 10 more chapters to go! (Although I thought there would be 15 chapters left.)
1/12/2017 c41 wintersnowmelody
Mixed feelings about everyone. Good chapter though. My hate for Claude is now consolidated.
Mixed feelings about everyone. Good chapter though. My hate for Claude is now consolidated.