11/22/2016 c1 2J.Cousy
You have a couple of mistakes here and there (like switching between past and present tense in the middle of the chapter without a clear reason why). Overall this first chapter is fair. I'd say you'd be better off establishing the characters and their friendship fully before pulling them apart, because there's no reader attachment to them or their relationship.

Also, it's good to have a quick pace, but in this case it feels like you're flying through things without establishing setting and characters first. Right now both of your main characters are very unlikable and bland; their plight is not interesting because we don't know them.

There is potential here so I'm looking forward to seeing how you move forward