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5/1/2021 c1 Guest
Great start! I'd like to see how this is going to turn out. You know what, you can join NovelStar's writing competition.
4/26/2017 c1 28CMfan5000
Things I like:
It's short, sweet and to the point.
Some of its characters are animals.
It has a happy ending.

Thing I find disturbing:
There are two possible impressions of Mr Eddy's actions, but it is not clear which is true.
First, that Mr. Eddy is going to pummel the rug without looking under it, even though he has a puppy and (Not stated, but anyone who has a puppy learns its habits fairly quickly) that it is fond of hiding.
Second, that the puppy is familiar with this play acting, and responds to a set of cues by coming out from under the rug is less disturbing.

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