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5/19/2017 c1 4She Who Loves Pineapples II
This was some great dialogue! Right from the beginning it gives you that unsettling feeling that something is wrong and you want to keep reading to figure out what.

The formatting was just a bit confusing, though. I think it would be a lot easier to read if you didn't leave blank lines between the character names and what they say.

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