for Sailing Away7/5/2017 c1 
5SimonClemens
It's fine.
The opening part did the character's feelings across, although I feel you layed it on a little thick.
If you want to write a move script, then just write it in script form. I still read those.
5SimonClemensIt's fine.
The opening part did the character's feelings across, although I feel you layed it on a little thick.
If you want to write a move script, then just write it in script form. I still read those.
7/5/2017 c1 70BradytheJust
Yay, She's finally happy!
I really liked how you had Arianna reflect on her life and How boring and meaningless it had become until she met her alien, and I agree with you. When nothing ties you down sometimes running away is the best choice.
Amazing job and a great story! I can't wait to see what you write next!
70BradytheJustYay, She's finally happy!
I really liked how you had Arianna reflect on her life and How boring and meaningless it had become until she met her alien, and I agree with you. When nothing ties you down sometimes running away is the best choice.
Amazing job and a great story! I can't wait to see what you write next!
7/4/2017 c1 8LorrahBear
Nice one shot here. I wish I knew more of what your alien character (and Arianna for that matter) looked like. What his ship looked like.
I wish there was more, but it's solid as it is. Well done.
8LorrahBearNice one shot here. I wish I knew more of what your alien character (and Arianna for that matter) looked like. What his ship looked like.
I wish there was more, but it's solid as it is. Well done.