for A Little Something Brighter7/10/2017 c1 
13Shailaputri
Hi..give her brother a name..else I confused initially James for her brother because his sister also involved in cleaning..seemed more or less same pair without the siblings names. It took sometime to understand that I am reading about two pair of brother and sisters.
13ShailaputriHi..give her brother a name..else I confused initially James for her brother because his sister also involved in cleaning..seemed more or less same pair without the siblings names. It took sometime to understand that I am reading about two pair of brother and sisters.
7/7/2017 c1 5SimonClemens
This should be in filed under Romance.
I, putting it bluntly, am not known for liking romance stories but I did not vomit reading this one. So...it's bearable?
The dialogue is alright, needs a little flow fixing.
Good characterization.
5SimonClemensThis should be in filed under Romance.
I, putting it bluntly, am not known for liking romance stories but I did not vomit reading this one. So...it's bearable?
The dialogue is alright, needs a little flow fixing.
Good characterization.