for The Hunter and The Creature2/9/2018 c1 
44Torey Hylton
I liked the twist at the end but your story needs some work. You don't really describe anything. Describe in detail how the hunter is feeling, and describe the noises and surroundings. It lacks depth. Also some sentences lack proper grammar. You need to use commas more often.
44Torey HyltonI liked the twist at the end but your story needs some work. You don't really describe anything. Describe in detail how the hunter is feeling, and describe the noises and surroundings. It lacks depth. Also some sentences lack proper grammar. You need to use commas more often.