for Life is Complicated3/16/2018 c5 
21WafflesandUnicorn
Life lessons, kids. Don't drink, it causes unnecessary problems.
How'd Grant know she needed to go to the ER?
How the hell is her mother's name pronounced?
21WafflesandUnicornLife lessons, kids. Don't drink, it causes unnecessary problems.
How'd Grant know she needed to go to the ER?
How the hell is her mother's name pronounced?
2/25/2018 c4 WafflesandUnicorn
There's a lot going on this chapter, but it was still very amusing.
Meg needs to get it together, girl was a wreck this chapter. This is why you don't drink alcohol, kids. Hope she's better in the next one.
So Grant can be a decent human being. Who knew? I didn't. Still don't like him very much though.
Ah, the family dynamic. I love it. They're so terrible to each other, and it's wonderful. Why haven't we seen Meg's family yet? I mean, there was the little scene with her mom, but that was it. I wanna know how her family interacts.
Okay, I don't know if I've mentioned this before, but I'm gonna do it now just because it bothered me during this chapter. Have you ever been told that when a new person speaks you're supposed to start a new paragraph? It would really help if you did that, because a lot if the time you'll have two different characters talking in the same paragraph, and it gets really confusing to keep track of who's saying what. For example, towards the end of the chapter, when Grant was trying to get to Meg before she left, he and Drew were talking. Their dialogue was in the same paragraph, and I ended up having to reread that part to figure out who said what, and I'm still not entirely sure. I really think you should start new paragraphs when a new person speaks, because as a reader it's confusing and exhausting to have to constantly go back to figure out who's saying what.
There's a lot going on this chapter, but it was still very amusing.
Meg needs to get it together, girl was a wreck this chapter. This is why you don't drink alcohol, kids. Hope she's better in the next one.
So Grant can be a decent human being. Who knew? I didn't. Still don't like him very much though.
Ah, the family dynamic. I love it. They're so terrible to each other, and it's wonderful. Why haven't we seen Meg's family yet? I mean, there was the little scene with her mom, but that was it. I wanna know how her family interacts.
Okay, I don't know if I've mentioned this before, but I'm gonna do it now just because it bothered me during this chapter. Have you ever been told that when a new person speaks you're supposed to start a new paragraph? It would really help if you did that, because a lot if the time you'll have two different characters talking in the same paragraph, and it gets really confusing to keep track of who's saying what. For example, towards the end of the chapter, when Grant was trying to get to Meg before she left, he and Drew were talking. Their dialogue was in the same paragraph, and I ended up having to reread that part to figure out who said what, and I'm still not entirely sure. I really think you should start new paragraphs when a new person speaks, because as a reader it's confusing and exhausting to have to constantly go back to figure out who's saying what.
2/19/2018 c3 Guest
I love this story so far. The plot is amazing and the characters are phenomenal.
I love this story so far. The plot is amazing and the characters are phenomenal.
2/18/2018 c3 WafflesandUnicorn
I literally have no clue what that song at the beginning was. Oh well.
I actually stopped reading to see if there was a karaoke version of I Won't Say I'm in Love with the muses doing the backups. I was amused to find that there is. And then of course I had to listen to the song. Definitely the best one in the movie.
I wish I had a good big brother. All three of mine are jerks, though one is less of a jerk than the other two.
Can I keep Drew? Is that an option?
Grant is slightly more tolerable in this chapter. I still don't like him, but he's less irritating.
I literally have no clue what that song at the beginning was. Oh well.
I actually stopped reading to see if there was a karaoke version of I Won't Say I'm in Love with the muses doing the backups. I was amused to find that there is. And then of course I had to listen to the song. Definitely the best one in the movie.
I wish I had a good big brother. All three of mine are jerks, though one is less of a jerk than the other two.
Can I keep Drew? Is that an option?
Grant is slightly more tolerable in this chapter. I still don't like him, but he's less irritating.
2/12/2018 c2 WafflesandUnicorn
Seriously, what's with the shitty pop songs at the beginnings?
The family dynamic is freaking wonderful. They had me cracking up. What's the birth order though? I'm guessing it's Alex, Lisa, Drew, and then Grant/Addison?
Speaking of. His name is Addison? Why? At first I thought that Addison was another girl, but nope! Grant is Addison. Where the heck did they get Grant from then? By the way, I still don't like him. Even if his name amuses me, I don't like him. Nope.
Alex is such a mom. Which is weird because he's clearly not their mother, but at the same time he might as well be with how he bosses them around.
Lisa seems like a typical sister, whiny and annoying. She's not horrible though, I certainly like her more than I like Grant.
Drew is still my favorite.
Also, are they British?
Seriously, what's with the shitty pop songs at the beginnings?
The family dynamic is freaking wonderful. They had me cracking up. What's the birth order though? I'm guessing it's Alex, Lisa, Drew, and then Grant/Addison?
Speaking of. His name is Addison? Why? At first I thought that Addison was another girl, but nope! Grant is Addison. Where the heck did they get Grant from then? By the way, I still don't like him. Even if his name amuses me, I don't like him. Nope.
Alex is such a mom. Which is weird because he's clearly not their mother, but at the same time he might as well be with how he bosses them around.
Lisa seems like a typical sister, whiny and annoying. She's not horrible though, I certainly like her more than I like Grant.
Drew is still my favorite.
Also, are they British?
2/12/2018 c1 WafflesandUnicorn
So the entirety of Call Me Maybe at the beginning is still very confusing, but the rest was quite amusing.
Meg seems likable enough so far, though her apparent like of alcoholic beverages was kind of shocking. I thought she was going into the fridge for food, but nope, she went straight for the beer.
Emmalee and Tim are meh. Kind of annoying, but friends can be like that sometimes, so it's not a big deal.
Grant irritates me already. Please don't let him be the one she ends up with? I feel like he will be, but I really don't want her to. He's so irritating, and it's only been one chapter.
Drew is already my favorite. The fact that he told her to sing Meg's song in Hercules (I can never remember what it's called) was wonderful. It's the best song in the movie.
But yeah, so far so good.
So the entirety of Call Me Maybe at the beginning is still very confusing, but the rest was quite amusing.
Meg seems likable enough so far, though her apparent like of alcoholic beverages was kind of shocking. I thought she was going into the fridge for food, but nope, she went straight for the beer.
Emmalee and Tim are meh. Kind of annoying, but friends can be like that sometimes, so it's not a big deal.
Grant irritates me already. Please don't let him be the one she ends up with? I feel like he will be, but I really don't want her to. He's so irritating, and it's only been one chapter.
Drew is already my favorite. The fact that he told her to sing Meg's song in Hercules (I can never remember what it's called) was wonderful. It's the best song in the movie.
But yeah, so far so good.
2/11/2018 c2 An Account No Longer Used
Certainly an interesting story. Even though I'm not a romantic, I felt that this story wasn't as bad as I thought it was going to be, for I assume that most romance is the same as every other romance. I hope that's not offensive to romance writers.
Anyway, that's off topic. I thought that it was really interesting how you introduced the "parts" with song lyrics. There are a few minor grammatical mistakes, but nothing big that would distract me from the story. Also, it seemed like some of the characters were needlessly sexualized, but maybe that's just me digging too much into it.
Certainly an interesting story. Even though I'm not a romantic, I felt that this story wasn't as bad as I thought it was going to be, for I assume that most romance is the same as every other romance. I hope that's not offensive to romance writers.
Anyway, that's off topic. I thought that it was really interesting how you introduced the "parts" with song lyrics. There are a few minor grammatical mistakes, but nothing big that would distract me from the story. Also, it seemed like some of the characters were needlessly sexualized, but maybe that's just me digging too much into it.