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7/8/2019 c1 19Twyla Cole
A ghost in May - that is awesome.
Hiding in transience though - that loses me a bit only because it isn't fully explored to me. I wonder how movement can be explored as a place to hide.

The dashes give it all a halting feeling like it doesn't know where to land. Which does give it an over all feeling of pain - shortness of breath - longing for for a full tide.

As fleeting as a ghost in May - that specificity is the best.
It's been a while since i reviewed a poem.

As always
-M
10/23/2018 c1 265Synthey
I got so hopeful at 'thrilled to simply dance' but then came 'though I know not the steps' very well written poem indeed!
10/20/2018 c1 43zanybellecloudo
Interesting poetry and topic. I particularly like the use of your words and the description of night and day.

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