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1/15/2019 c5 25Jaya Avendel
Showing everyone's point of view in the final chapter was an interesting thing to do but I love how it showed everyone's thoughts. The ending line gave such meaning to the story title!
1/15/2019 c5 18Sir Scott
I think so. Good luck with this story.
~Sir Scott
1/14/2019 c4 Sir Scott
I liked the use of the Loch Ness Monster that was pretty cool.
~Sir Scott
1/12/2019 c3 Sir Scott
Not sure. A presidential system has its pros and cons.
~Sir Scott
1/12/2019 c3 25Jaya Avendel
You carried across the atmosphere very well with Reynold's speech and the excitement of the people. I like the description of the Purgatory garrison and the envy of the children as they watched the firing show.
1/10/2019 c2 Jaya Avendel
The serious tone of your writing carries over well with the way you describe the men advancing and the action. The ending of this chapter with the fireworks gives it a good feel.

I would say the story could be set in Medieval Times
1/10/2019 c2 18Sir Scott
Middle Ages perhaps. You cram a lot of action in short amount of time. Which can be good if you are going for an action based story.
~Sir Scott
1/8/2019 c1 Sir Scott
I'll have to think about the shorts question. It's an interesting start. One mistake I saw was that I notice that you use we're for were, sometimes.
~Sir Scott

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