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8/4/2021 c1 Ways not on FP
Alright so this is looooooooong overdue but let's finally start reading Night Shadow.
Right off the bat this was a pretty funny read that got a good chuckle out of me. It was a very funny and relatable way to get introduced to the characters and I liked it a lot.
Looking forward to more. Good work, man.
7/28/2020 c1 bendy
...OK. Eh...this is TU4QU0I53T4IAN6L3. I hope I don't cause too much trouble here for you.

I got to say; this is a brilliant, classic start to the Night Shadow! A good punch of humor in this and I can tell that this is going to be a great series to read.

I'm curious about this.

First, Night Shadow casually makes his way into the supermarket. I thought that there would be fans surrounding him, but he seems to blend in with the crowd. I guess that doesn't matter since his powers went out of control near the end.

Second, I'm surprised of how those self-check machines seem to be 'sentient' or rather a pain in the a***. It likes a faulty wi-fi router where whenever the internet connection goes down, the loading page would appear as 'Get a better internet connection, scrub'. Bonus points for the machine saying 'loser' and that pushes Mason to his berserk point!

Also, Sydney's suggestion to calming down from stress; wine. Psychologically speaking, that can work.

This is a very good story and it's pretty funny. Can't wait to see more about this.
- Cheah
7/17/2020 c1 1StarlitDuck
That was really cool! I liked the character of Night Shadow. His powers also seem really interesting; I am interested in his backstory and how he came across the demon. I also thought that the whole set up was funny. I liked the joke that you ended on. Overall, good job!
4/29/2020 c1 TheLostEternity
Wow. Already, I love this so much.
Mason is a great character. And I like Sydney. When she said "I'm gonna need the wine bottle, aren't I?" I just burst into laughter.
And Dunnere... just wow. Super cool.
I love this a bunch, and I think you have a real talent for writing this. Really gives me Spider-Man vibes, which I love, so good job. I can't wait to read more, just from your character descriptions I think this should be real already.
:)
2/13/2020 c1 26Zukafu Chiriamoto
Very much enjoyed this first issue and I’m certain to be carrying on for more! I quite liked the style - very reminiscent of comic books whilst still being an effective story. I enjoyed the way you introduced character elements, especially about Night Shadow’s power.

Until next time,
Zukafu
10/25/2019 c1 15maskedhero100
I found this rather funny, and lets be honest, that Self-Checkout had it coming.

Your characters have interesting names, and I look forward to seeing what goes on in the other stories or "Issue's" as you call them.

Nice touch by the way, treating them like comic book issue's.

Although the grammar, punctuation and some of the words in some parts were a little choppy but it didn't take away the interest of the reader as it was still coherent enough to read and understand the message the writer is conveying.

Sometimes this can happen because a writer doesn't notice he or she has used the wrong words or that their sentence could be stronger if they changed it up just a bit.

I recommend Gramarly, I use it for my own works and it has really helped.

It's like having an editor that you dont have to pay lol.

Now, onto the next issue...
9/8/2019 c1 SharpDragonKlaw
Heyo! I finally had time to checkout your original works and I gotta say this was funny! Though to be fair to Night Shadow I probably would have done the same thing if the machine was being a jerk to me. Night Shadow is a very interesting character I look forward to reading more of his adventures.
4/27/2019 c1 Starshine89
Hahahahaha! Oh man, this was hilarious! Night Shadow got worked up because a self-checkout started to literally troll him?! HA! Man, you are a genius! So glad I gave this a read. Furthermore, I'm sorry I took this long to review, my dumb mind kept forgetting to read the story. Nonetheless, this was a great piece of work, and I can't wait to see what you have in store for us. Can't wait to see more! :D
2/23/2019 c1 3TheLastPaladin
This is GOLD! Great descriptive! It definitely is a bdamn good piece of work! I also love Sydney! She really made this whole piece work! Bravo!
2/20/2019 c1 4zm
Great story
2/17/2019 c1 Infinite's Ruby
Hey Spider! While I may not have an account on this site, it didn't stop me from reading this story.

I loved this story, the scene with the self-checkout left me in stitches, mostly due to me relating to Mason's frustration with faulty self-checkouts which has left me with an urge to destroy the stupid device.

Your blend of humor is wonderful to read as always. I loved your story. Keep up the great work as always you did an excellent job with this fic!
2/17/2019 c1 TheGameNguyener
Hey SD! I don't have a FictionPress account, but that won't stop me from reviewing. Although I don't follow superhero stories too much, I was able to visualize the scenery from both the past and present scenes. I had some laughs over the self-checkout, and I can totally relate to a scenario like that. Albeit, I wouldn't have a demon furiously help me destroy the thing. But it is hard to control your temper when dealing with a faulty checkout register. I've been there so many times!

There are a couple of errors I noticed throughout the story.

~"It was a calm night in Seattle...coming from late from work..." (I noticed that the preposition 'from' was repeated twice. I assume it supposed to be "coming home late from work" or something similar. But I also have this glaring issue where I accidentally repeat a preposition that's not supposed to be there.)

~"Shredded Parmesan: $4:27" (I think you accidentally put a colon instead of a period. The same goes for the loaf of bread ($5:62) before it decided to troll Night Shadow.)

~"Dunnere, being the source of Night Shadow's powers...not one, not two, but four six large arms made of darkness..." (Does he have 4 arms? 6 arms? 46?)

There is some more punctuation here and there, but it's not that noticeable. Overall, the main scene can be relatable to almost everyone. That's the kind of appeal for stories like this. It's pretty solid for the humor department! Good job with this one!

~TGN

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