
2/11/2021 c1 Guest
who yells out the description of the person they're talking to? so bad. cringey. this needs to be reworked
who yells out the description of the person they're talking to? so bad. cringey. this needs to be reworked
7/8/2019 c1 Home-Depot-Lover
The story is intriguing, but I don't understand the characters so far. Not the best way to describe the characters through dialogue. It feels very unnatural. The potential is there. Just keep at it!
The story is intriguing, but I don't understand the characters so far. Not the best way to describe the characters through dialogue. It feels very unnatural. The potential is there. Just keep at it!
3/21/2019 c3
2J.Cousy
A talking stone would have startled me too haha.
This story makes me laugh quite often. Lots of humor elements

A talking stone would have startled me too haha.
This story makes me laugh quite often. Lots of humor elements
3/20/2019 c3
18Sir Scott
Interesting chapter. If her clothes dissolves in water, I hope she doesn't get caught in a rain storm.
~Sir Scott

Interesting chapter. If her clothes dissolves in water, I hope she doesn't get caught in a rain storm.
~Sir Scott
3/20/2019 c3 Sakumira Agashi
Again, you did a great job writing this chapter. I love the adventure they are going on, and the interaction between characters is quite interesting as well!
Again, you did a great job writing this chapter. I love the adventure they are going on, and the interaction between characters is quite interesting as well!
3/16/2019 c2 Guest
Ugly and shellfish is spelled wrong so bad review on my part but some of it was ok post more than 2 chapters so yeah
Ugly and shellfish is spelled wrong so bad review on my part but some of it was ok post more than 2 chapters so yeah
3/16/2019 c1 Guest
Bad
Bad
3/13/2019 c2
2J.Cousy
Sending her off on the fruit vendor's cart is a whole level of hilarity I didn't expect. The never-ending dresses was pretty funny as well.

Sending her off on the fruit vendor's cart is a whole level of hilarity I didn't expect. The never-ending dresses was pretty funny as well.
3/10/2019 c2
18Sir Scott
Interesting. I'm surprised that the guards were able to manhandle a goddess. Anyway, this was a pretty entertaining chapter. You made a mistake by using the word thrown for throne.
~Sir Scott

Interesting. I'm surprised that the guards were able to manhandle a goddess. Anyway, this was a pretty entertaining chapter. You made a mistake by using the word thrown for throne.
~Sir Scott
3/3/2019 c1 Sir Scott
It's a good start. I liked how you told most of the details in the dialogue. That's how it was done on the old time radio shows.
~Sir Scott
It's a good start. I liked how you told most of the details in the dialogue. That's how it was done on the old time radio shows.
~Sir Scott