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8/14/2019 c1 Jim202
I liked Riley's introduction and her return to town. You dropped intriguing bits and pieces during that part. More proofreading is needed, though. I noticed a few issues with the technical writing, like missing periods or commas at the ends of sentences, as well as some incorrect grammar ("Why didn't you just stayed where you were?"). Also, the info about Riley being financially stable didn't need to be in parenthesis. The tension between Riley and Lydia was fascinating. It made me hope that they resolve their issues. Riley's actions toward the end were impressive too.

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