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5/29 c1 The Feline Overlord
Finally finished with this, and man, it was a wild ride! Great job Gold! There was a good balance of action and exposition, and I love that even the minor characters have a lot of depth to them.

The only feedback I have is a couple small things—the pacing of the action scenes feels a bit off sometimes, and there are some inconsistencies in switching between present/past tense.

Overall a great first chapter though! I'm also happy to see that my "Radio McTowerFace" made its way in!

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