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for Positively, Neville Longbottom

1/10/2021 c1 Fabian Cortez
Again you have the capacity to draw your reader into your created world. Your use of words to achieve this is ideal for the chosen subject and shows a depth of, loss, emotional observation and for want of a better word fatigue. Hearkening for times past, when there was an energy and excitement of the unknown future possibilities. Youth, virility, sex and not settling for second best. The character drawn here, feels like they've tried it all, and it's proven wanting. What's being viewed stirred feelings of regret Maybe they should have opted for the nice as opposed to what appeared to be the exciting choice. What if they'd just tried anything else? How would life have been turned out then? I know this is a long review, but your piece moved me, and this is what comes across to me from this. Great work. Fabian Cortez
12/25/2020 c1 167nickyO
It builds a light hardheartedness into a weary mood.

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