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3/6/2021 c1 JaveHarron
A very interesting little premise here. I'm reminded (at least in worldbuilding) of Roger Zelazny's Jack of Shadows. I hope you get a chance to read that if you haven't already. As far as what I liked about your story, I enjoyed the worldbuilding and your suspense scenes. I felt they were well paced. I felt that some descriptive text, like allusions or metaphors, could help give the narrator a more unique voice. That is at least what works for me, but I look forward to your future works.
3/5/2021 c1 2MV Kramer
Very interesting. Now I want to know more about Anima and Animus, plus the temple of healers, plus the magical creatures like Purdaa. If you wrote more stories in this setting, I'd read them.

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