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3/23 c1 9HamletThePrince
Shalom!
This is an interesting story for sure. Firstly, I would like to say your writing is excellent. There are not any mistakes I can see and I enjoy your writing style. I also liked the story over all.
One thing that could make it better is more background information. Why is this girl here? Why are these people interacting? Things such as that might make it better.
Overall, Bravo!

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