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5/25 c2 megemu
"Like an infection waiting to happen." Love it.

Is this a short story or a novel? For some reason I have the impression it's a novel, and so I wasn't expecting all the detail about the shadow-it kills the tension a bit. Might consider adding a few more lurking hints and then piecing out the info, breadcrumb style.
5/25 c1 megemu
The opening lines/paragraph really worked for me. You might considering showing us/having him remember a particular moment of his feasting. Maybe of the girl with the brown hair who lives in Huxley apartments? You could show us his sigh moving a particular object, his moan cracking a particular wall, him absorbing a particular life and trapping it with the Others. I like the concept.

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