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6/27 c1 collectivekhaos
I love this concept - and the way you've executed it! It brings up a lot of well-loved pieces of media in my mind, as theater and dance are a rich vein for horror.

If we were to speak of it like a movie, I think you could hold each "shot" a bit longer. Linger on the descriptions and emotions. The shine of blood on Yuv's face, the audience's twisted expressions and their hands - white knuckled on their seats. Let the reader build a vivid picture for each beat of the story before the next pulls the rug out from under them.

That said, this story will definitely be sticking in my head for a while. It's one of those stories that motivates me to work on my own pieces, which is always welcome!

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