1/27 c1 52master's apprentice
I appreciate the effort but I don't know if it fully lands.
From a technical standpoint not all of your haikus have the right syllable distribution.
From a readers view I found the poem a little jarring to read. With a haiku generally we give some leniency to proper grammar and sentence structure because of its limited format. However when you put a bunch of them together in such as way as for them to be read sequentially it just kind of reads like a poorly written (as in grammatically) poem.

Perhaps if the haikus were still related but designed not to read as a continuous poem it would feel more like reading several related haiku poems instead of 1 complete poem broken up into chunks.