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Do you know those poems you read and say "Wow, I wish I wrote that!" - I interpret this poem to have that sentiment. There is a level of awe as the persona reads through the other's body of work. And of course, since it's you who wrote the poem, there is grit! Exemplified by your last line. Beautifully made! It gave a different sort of touch/twist to the poem. I thoroughly enjoyed that.

I like how your use of imagery here - you called attention to those sensations - You made me recall and imagine the smell of ropes and the ocean for example!

I especially LOVED the penultimate stanza and these lines. "It revolves in orbit, balanced on the tip of your tongue." Wow! I found it romantic. The persona seeing the subject as having that much influence on the "world" just by their word/tongue. Amazing.

Keep writing!