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2/14/2014 c1 xxx1000
Interesting concept, but a bit too short. Couldn't really get into the story.
5/22/2009 c1 2GRudge
This was a great short story. Is there more to this? You could really make this into a longer, and great story!
11/4/2004 c1 11Avery Rose
interesting... fight scenes are difficult to write. About the decriptions at the very beginning, it could use more show than tell... but I absolutely *hate* doing descriptions of a certain kind of dress, so I know it's hard to put into words. Great job building the tension...could proabably use a little more...but I ~loved~ the twist. The ending was rushed, good description in the last paragraph, but I would have rather read more of a show than a tell for the ending. I love small stories, they're so fun to write ^_^
4/10/2004 c1 31Justokre
Hehe, interesting. I enjoyed it.
5/14/2002 c1 5hockeyave07
WOW! sweet story
10/6/2001 c1 Miba
I love this.
4/11/2000 c1 Da Blob 5
Could be good
4/11/2000 c1 The Evil Critic 4
This had no plot.. it wasn;'t a complete story, though it was interesting despite your unculcured Description. You could do something with this, with time, and a beta reader
4/11/2000 c1 SWR 8
Hm ... go on ...
4/11/2000 c1 Kate 6
Nice bomb at the end...kinda like my type and style..kinda cheeky...
4/11/2000 c1 Kadabra 7
Not bad.
4/11/2000 c1 Sarah 9
I really liked this story, really cool. A look into the future and the virtual reality games. Good job!
4/11/2000 c1 Wolfish grin
I thought that it was very good. The fighting scenes are always hard to write and keep the action going, but you did a good job. The ending was great. Keep up the good work.

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