for When i First Saw Your Sparkling Eyes3/15/2003 c6 
2pinkangelwing
Hey Kendall. It's me Steph! Love your story. Please write more. Hope there's romance between Oliver and Fiona.
2pinkangelwingHey Kendall. It's me Steph! Love your story. Please write more. Hope there's romance between Oliver and Fiona.
8/14/2002 c7 102Twilight Moon
No! Ack! I was really getting in to this! Oh, the horror! Oh, the pain! Okay, me, calm down. It'll be back. Calm down. You are a really good writer, you do know that, right? Anyway, keep writing, please, and good bye.
102Twilight MoonNo! Ack! I was really getting in to this! Oh, the horror! Oh, the pain! Okay, me, calm down. It'll be back. Calm down. You are a really good writer, you do know that, right? Anyway, keep writing, please, and good bye.
7/25/2002 c7 1Elij
Hi Kendall!
Well, I am sorry to see this story go...this was going to the first I was going to read and review after so many weeks of NOT reading anything on Fanfiction! LOL! Oh well, one can't win 'em all!
You do have my understanding in wishing to go over and edit your work as I do it all the time before submitting my writing or when my writing is accepted by a publication.
Hope to see your newer rendition of your novel in the not too far distant future.
Ciao!
Nicole :-)
1ElijHi Kendall!
Well, I am sorry to see this story go...this was going to the first I was going to read and review after so many weeks of NOT reading anything on Fanfiction! LOL! Oh well, one can't win 'em all!
You do have my understanding in wishing to go over and edit your work as I do it all the time before submitting my writing or when my writing is accepted by a publication.
Hope to see your newer rendition of your novel in the not too far distant future.
Ciao!
Nicole :-)
4/29/2002 c6 Meina
The descriptions were especially vivid in this chapter.Great character development too.The names were quite interesting.Can't wait for more!
The descriptions were especially vivid in this chapter.Great character development too.The names were quite interesting.Can't wait for more!
4/29/2002 c6 Elij
You continue to write well and keep your story moving at a nice pace. Your characters seem to be a bit more tangible in this chapter...your characters have developed more with your good ongoing detailed description in your colourful tale. :-)
You continue to write well and keep your story moving at a nice pace. Your characters seem to be a bit more tangible in this chapter...your characters have developed more with your good ongoing detailed description in your colourful tale. :-)
4/10/2002 c1 possessed puppy
that was really cool. I liked it
that was really cool. I liked it
1/31/2002 c5 Elij
Great chapter! I love the way this particular chapter ended...with true, positive hope. Very nice!
Great chapter! I love the way this particular chapter ended...with true, positive hope. Very nice!
1/29/2002 c5 Meina
Well for your information I loved the chapter. To say the least I had a wonderful birthday and out of the few presents I got this is a favorite. I rushed down to read it as soon as my family cleared out. Even my sister sent me a card from college and who can forget the money.Anyways I'm rambling so in conclusion..16 isn't so bad..not sweet either but not bad. Love the descriptions in this chapter and the characters are very well defined. Excellent work...write more soon!
Well for your information I loved the chapter. To say the least I had a wonderful birthday and out of the few presents I got this is a favorite. I rushed down to read it as soon as my family cleared out. Even my sister sent me a card from college and who can forget the money.Anyways I'm rambling so in conclusion..16 isn't so bad..not sweet either but not bad. Love the descriptions in this chapter and the characters are very well defined. Excellent work...write more soon!
1/17/2002 c2 chibi-van
Amazing! Like the description!
Amazing! Like the description!
1/13/2002 c4 Elij
Your characters continue to become more convincingly real. Excellent chapter for the character development. :-)
Your characters continue to become more convincingly real. Excellent chapter for the character development. :-)
1/13/2002 c4 Meina
well..sitting on my can doing nada except for browsing FFN today and what do i find...you updated and didn't tell me.Shame on you! I'm still lovin this even though it was terribly short. Write more and soon! (too much sugar eh...?) Anything happening with Fiona and Oliver? Might just be me...Not sure what else to say so keep up the excellent work.
well..sitting on my can doing nada except for browsing FFN today and what do i find...you updated and didn't tell me.Shame on you! I'm still lovin this even though it was terribly short. Write more and soon! (too much sugar eh...?) Anything happening with Fiona and Oliver? Might just be me...Not sure what else to say so keep up the excellent work.
1/4/2002 c1 8Raonaid Luckwell
Truly inspiring, I would go onwards but people do make that annoying habit of dropping on my doorstep at all the wrong times. But I know for sure I'm coming back to this. You have a winner here, one that could draw someone in. Way better than any of my own.
What sucked me most of all was the beginning. It just screamed to my conscious mind to continue. I should tell you what shouldn't I? ::laughs:: This part:: "Not long ago, When man regained his magic, Chaos ruled Over the once peaceful land. Two Childhood friends Were to determine The fate of the land. And a Goddess was summoned To save them all..." To me that is the strongest pull into a story that I have read in a long time. Almost as bad as RA Salvatore's works concerning the dark elves {Meaning good.. I love that author RA Salvatore's works..so that is the greatest praise from me}
8Raonaid LuckwellTruly inspiring, I would go onwards but people do make that annoying habit of dropping on my doorstep at all the wrong times. But I know for sure I'm coming back to this. You have a winner here, one that could draw someone in. Way better than any of my own.
What sucked me most of all was the beginning. It just screamed to my conscious mind to continue. I should tell you what shouldn't I? ::laughs:: This part:: "Not long ago, When man regained his magic, Chaos ruled Over the once peaceful land. Two Childhood friends Were to determine The fate of the land. And a Goddess was summoned To save them all..." To me that is the strongest pull into a story that I have read in a long time. Almost as bad as RA Salvatore's works concerning the dark elves {Meaning good.. I love that author RA Salvatore's works..so that is the greatest praise from me}
12/28/2001 c3 1Elij
Awesome first person narrative writing! Your main character has intelligence with 'punch' and your unique storyline is powerfully fluid. Sincerely hope you continue this. I love this. I am placing your tale in my 'favourite stories' list.
P.S. Get this copyright if you haven't already done so.
1ElijAwesome first person narrative writing! Your main character has intelligence with 'punch' and your unique storyline is powerfully fluid. Sincerely hope you continue this. I love this. I am placing your tale in my 'favourite stories' list.
P.S. Get this copyright if you haven't already done so.
12/9/2001 c3 Meina forgot to sign in.stupid me
Well let me see here...I have to say...MARVELOUS!
I love this story except the chapter was so short.I also have to say that I love your characters and settings. They're so...real.Keep up the excellent work and thanks for plugging the site too!
Well let me see here...I have to say...MARVELOUS!
I love this story except the chapter was so short.I also have to say that I love your characters and settings. They're so...real.Keep up the excellent work and thanks for plugging the site too!
10/10/2001 c2 Meina
Wonderful job once again! I can't wait to see what happens. Keep up the great work.
Wonderful job once again! I can't wait to see what happens. Keep up the great work.