for Petals in the Mist11/19/2001 c1 
69Lowell Boston
Elowyn,
beautiful piece. To use words to let us 'see' from a new and fresh life perspective is the the aim of every poet. I found this piece delicious and innocent, especially the stanza - This is a gentle storm of scents I adore / From daffodils to daisies / And sunflowers galore / Watching them flitter, flutter / Dance to the floor. I did find myself
stumbling over lines 7-8. Somehow the two word stanza and the period after 'come' seems to arrest the flow of your meter. I'm new to free-verse phrasing so the fault is most likely mine. Also, thank you for reviewing my poem - Circle of Gold. The piece sat on my desktop for about two months. I felt it wasn't finished until I looked at it again, and decided otherwise. Thanks.
Lowell
69Lowell BostonElowyn,
beautiful piece. To use words to let us 'see' from a new and fresh life perspective is the the aim of every poet. I found this piece delicious and innocent, especially the stanza - This is a gentle storm of scents I adore / From daffodils to daisies / And sunflowers galore / Watching them flitter, flutter / Dance to the floor. I did find myself
stumbling over lines 7-8. Somehow the two word stanza and the period after 'come' seems to arrest the flow of your meter. I'm new to free-verse phrasing so the fault is most likely mine. Also, thank you for reviewing my poem - Circle of Gold. The piece sat on my desktop for about two months. I felt it wasn't finished until I looked at it again, and decided otherwise. Thanks.
Lowell
11/13/2001 c1 4Kriyn Dake
I love reading your poems, both silently and aloud. The essence of your poems always lingers in the air even after the last word dies away. beautiful. I can just visualise the scene in front of me. a dance of petals. good luck for the O levels too :)
4Kriyn DakeI love reading your poems, both silently and aloud. The essence of your poems always lingers in the air even after the last word dies away. beautiful. I can just visualise the scene in front of me. a dance of petals. good luck for the O levels too :)
9/1/2001 c1 9Scarr C
Welsome to the world of free verse at last! We seem to be heading in diverse styles, just like my sudden affinity with rhyming recently. I loved the last two lines, it seemed to add a perfectly wistful and nostalgic touch to the poem. PETALS! (switches to unchracteristic petal-fetish mode)
9Scarr CWelsome to the world of free verse at last! We seem to be heading in diverse styles, just like my sudden affinity with rhyming recently. I loved the last two lines, it seemed to add a perfectly wistful and nostalgic touch to the poem. PETALS! (switches to unchracteristic petal-fetish mode)
8/11/2001 c1 Riley S
ohhh.. i like... i do, he you should enter that in a contest. I enter some of mine in at Poetry.com, you should try it 'cause i reqally likes that one!
ohhh.. i like... i do, he you should enter that in a contest. I enter some of mine in at Poetry.com, you should try it 'cause i reqally likes that one!