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11/26/2002 c1 13Jayiin Mistaya
Nice twist. I'm always a fan of taking common situations - cliche moments that we all look at and spend so much of our emotion and passion on and then warping them into something new. The critic in me wants to accuse you of being melodramatic, but if I did, I would be a hypocrite. This was very well written, very smooth and very concise. Some of the dialogue seems forced, and the introduction of Beth is clumsy and random, but the way you use her to drive home the ending was nothing short of brilliant.
9/3/2001 c1 13Dr. Tamwe
If anyone knows how to fix the small formatting problem of having the text run off the side, please email me at - I imagine it's distracting to some readers, but I can't figure out what's wrong with it.

Thanks,

-Kelly
8/31/2001 c1 2PepsiAngel
This was soooo good! I loved it. Instant favorite. I hope your teacher give you an A on it! :) Ciao!

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