for And She Danced11/22/2003 c2 
18Val Mora
It's a good beginning, but you really ought to check your spelling and grammar, because it's making what would otherwise be an interesting beginning into something that's a touch tedious. You should probably also insert semicolons in certain places, which would make it much easier to read.
It's a good idea, though.
Also, thanks for your reviews of the VDD offshoots!
18Val MoraIt's a good beginning, but you really ought to check your spelling and grammar, because it's making what would otherwise be an interesting beginning into something that's a touch tedious. You should probably also insert semicolons in certain places, which would make it much easier to read.
It's a good idea, though.
Also, thanks for your reviews of the VDD offshoots!
5/12/2003 c4 54Werecat99
A dream! Good. I always like it when dreams find their way into stories.
I would like to know more about their magic, though.
PS
Thanks for the reviews.
54Werecat99A dream! Good. I always like it when dreams find their way into stories.
I would like to know more about their magic, though.
PS
Thanks for the reviews.
7/21/2002 c10 11Lady Aryun
This is good! I really really like it! I've been meaning to write this rewview for a while now, but FF.net's been fussy. ^_^ I like how you've made it mostly dialouge. Love it love it love it! *huggles* ^_^ ~ Cat AKA Aryun
11Lady AryunThis is good! I really really like it! I've been meaning to write this rewview for a while now, but FF.net's been fussy. ^_^ I like how you've made it mostly dialouge. Love it love it love it! *huggles* ^_^ ~ Cat AKA Aryun
6/2/2002 c10 6Strider Hunter
This story, fantasy or otherwise, really leaves an impression on the reader. The world you've created is so mystical, with magic spells at every corner, and suspenseful with different parties with differing agendas. I applaud Matthew for not trusting any of the adults...you don't want to become embroiled in dangerous politics while your survival is threatened.
Hopefully the siblings will finally escape and leave them behind, though I doubt that's what you're planning for them, Dee...
6Strider HunterThis story, fantasy or otherwise, really leaves an impression on the reader. The world you've created is so mystical, with magic spells at every corner, and suspenseful with different parties with differing agendas. I applaud Matthew for not trusting any of the adults...you don't want to become embroiled in dangerous politics while your survival is threatened.
Hopefully the siblings will finally escape and leave them behind, though I doubt that's what you're planning for them, Dee...
4/16/2002 c10 DeeEe
HEY! I didn't compare Ruby to a curb! I compared the stupid stopping place of this chapter! See how mean she is, calling ME mean?
HEY! I didn't compare Ruby to a curb! I compared the stupid stopping place of this chapter! See how mean she is, calling ME mean?
4/10/2002 c10 3Ruby
I'm a very good example of why the curb is bad when trying to parallel park -_- See how mean she is? ::points at DE:: I have to review her ficcy, but will she review mine? Nooooooo. Some of my things have very few reviews, mind you.
3RubyI'm a very good example of why the curb is bad when trying to parallel park -_- See how mean she is? ::points at DE:: I have to review her ficcy, but will she review mine? Nooooooo. Some of my things have very few reviews, mind you.
3/14/2002 c1 Phantashea
Chase Will be put in to (A Paradise To Remember)
If You Object Contact Me At ()
And Please Give Him A Last Name.
Phantashea
Chase Will be put in to (A Paradise To Remember)
If You Object Contact Me At ()
And Please Give Him A Last Name.
Phantashea
3/13/2002 c2 Darksquall
nice story =) i liked it
Darksquall
nice story =) i liked it
Darksquall
2/7/2002 c8 6Strider Hunter
Hey, Dee. You know, the more I read this story, the more I sympathize with Matthew and Alicia. This is a really sad story, when I think about it! The twins share so much, rely on each other completely. I was particularly moved in the last few chapters, when they agreed that if one of them died, then the other would follow. Now I'm rooting for them all the way!
Noted a few typos in this chapter, but that's besides the point. I want to read more!
6Strider HunterHey, Dee. You know, the more I read this story, the more I sympathize with Matthew and Alicia. This is a really sad story, when I think about it! The twins share so much, rely on each other completely. I was particularly moved in the last few chapters, when they agreed that if one of them died, then the other would follow. Now I'm rooting for them all the way!
Noted a few typos in this chapter, but that's besides the point. I want to read more!
1/28/2002 c8 3Ruby
^_^ *Finally*, you get around to posting...I thought you wrote more of this though. Ahwell. And I'm *much* nicer than my namesake, thankyouverymuch. -The infamous Kat
3Ruby^_^ *Finally*, you get around to posting...I thought you wrote more of this though. Ahwell. And I'm *much* nicer than my namesake, thankyouverymuch. -The infamous Kat
1/17/2002 c4 6Strider Hunter
Hey DeeEe, Strider here, as promised. Well I'm not too much into fantasy stories, but your twins Alicia and Matthew seem like an interesting pair. Both have magical powers, it seems, and I'm curious as to how they differ from each other, if at all. A helpful thought, it would read a little easier if each paragraph were spaced between, including dialogue. I didn't have too much trouble personally, since each chapter isn't very long, it's just a thought. Bravo on a good effort so far.
6Strider HunterHey DeeEe, Strider here, as promised. Well I'm not too much into fantasy stories, but your twins Alicia and Matthew seem like an interesting pair. Both have magical powers, it seems, and I'm curious as to how they differ from each other, if at all. A helpful thought, it would read a little easier if each paragraph were spaced between, including dialogue. I didn't have too much trouble personally, since each chapter isn't very long, it's just a thought. Bravo on a good effort so far.
12/27/2001 c7 6June Luna
Goodgood story type thing.. I'm too zonked out to write anything constructive.. sorry... yay.
6June LunaGoodgood story type thing.. I'm too zonked out to write anything constructive.. sorry... yay.
12/19/2001 c7 2Sirena Oculare
This is soooo good! Please hurry up with chapter 8! I want to know what happens!
2Sirena OculareThis is soooo good! Please hurry up with chapter 8! I want to know what happens!