for The Firedrake Chronicles4/13/2006 c1 your sister whocannot spell
Well,we're in tech class and we have nothing better to do than review your story.i think i did this sometime last week at one point ...can't remember.Kyleen says hi.So does MR JAMEIS_ON_DA_ROOF
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Well,we're in tech class and we have nothing better to do than review your story.i think i did this sometime last week at one point ...can't remember.Kyleen says hi.So does MR JAMEIS_ON_DA_ROOF
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11/29/2004 c25 
2BuffLie
Fantastic. As always. If you decide to get this published and someone is smart enough to accept it... let me know. I'll buy three copies ;)
2BuffLieFantastic. As always. If you decide to get this published and someone is smart enough to accept it... let me know. I'll buy three copies ;)
11/19/2004 c25 34moonarised polane
wow. i just couldn't stop reading this. this piece was marvelous. you've managed to explore several themes in this piece, like loyalty;love vengeance etc. and pull it all off excellently.wonderful work here.i hope to see more of your fiction.this goes onto my faves.
34moonarised polanewow. i just couldn't stop reading this. this piece was marvelous. you've managed to explore several themes in this piece, like loyalty;love vengeance etc. and pull it all off excellently.wonderful work here.i hope to see more of your fiction.this goes onto my faves.
10/26/2004 c25 NYB
I've got to admit, this is a damn fine story, without a doubt one of the very best I've ever read online. Your writing is of high quality, your sense of pacing excellent, and your imagination quite amusing. I think you should try to get it published, although you may want to give it one more coat of polish before you do.
What am I trying to say? Dude, this ROCKS! (No pun intended.)
I loved reading it. The depth of thought that seems to have gone into it is impressive-I especially liked the artwork!
Be sure to drop me a line if you ever start a sequel.
I've got to admit, this is a damn fine story, without a doubt one of the very best I've ever read online. Your writing is of high quality, your sense of pacing excellent, and your imagination quite amusing. I think you should try to get it published, although you may want to give it one more coat of polish before you do.
What am I trying to say? Dude, this ROCKS! (No pun intended.)
I loved reading it. The depth of thought that seems to have gone into it is impressive-I especially liked the artwork!
Be sure to drop me a line if you ever start a sequel.
9/13/2004 c24 2BuffLie
Wow. I had no idea this chapter was even up. I got the alert for the 25th chapter today... but it doesn't exist. I'm quite confused. But, at any rate, I got to read a chapter... so that's all that matters. I love this story to pieces :)
2BuffLieWow. I had no idea this chapter was even up. I got the alert for the 25th chapter today... but it doesn't exist. I'm quite confused. But, at any rate, I got to read a chapter... so that's all that matters. I love this story to pieces :)
6/24/2004 c24 Lost Chi
I am still loving it! Please keep me informed on when you add a new chapter. Please update often and keep reading and reviewing my story. As a reminder, it is called the Pocketwatch. It has only 4 reviews so far and I really need to know what other people think. I wonder if it is as good as yours? Bet not! Anyway, keep writing, reading, and reviewing. Bye and thanks!
I am still loving it! Please keep me informed on when you add a new chapter. Please update often and keep reading and reviewing my story. As a reminder, it is called the Pocketwatch. It has only 4 reviews so far and I really need to know what other people think. I wonder if it is as good as yours? Bet not! Anyway, keep writing, reading, and reviewing. Bye and thanks!
5/21/2004 c24 5Abinikai
Well, I would like you to know that I really feel for you-the same has often happened for me! And I know the whole not-wanting-to-write thingy, too. Well, I'm glad you moved on & began writing again, because I don't know what I'd do if you didn't finish this story! I think I might have to become your personal stalker, hunt you down across the world and hold a gun to your head while you finished writing it...or at least told me what happens. But aren't you glad I don't have to do that now? I'm glad you're back on your feet. I've enjoyed reading this story far too much for you to just get discouraged and quit now. There is no sense in quiting something you've already begun and people like. It's really sad when that happens. Good luck and have fun writing. I'll read the next chapter whenever you have it posted!
Much love,
Abinikai, Your faithful reader.
5AbinikaiWell, I would like you to know that I really feel for you-the same has often happened for me! And I know the whole not-wanting-to-write thingy, too. Well, I'm glad you moved on & began writing again, because I don't know what I'd do if you didn't finish this story! I think I might have to become your personal stalker, hunt you down across the world and hold a gun to your head while you finished writing it...or at least told me what happens. But aren't you glad I don't have to do that now? I'm glad you're back on your feet. I've enjoyed reading this story far too much for you to just get discouraged and quit now. There is no sense in quiting something you've already begun and people like. It's really sad when that happens. Good luck and have fun writing. I'll read the next chapter whenever you have it posted!
Much love,
Abinikai, Your faithful reader.
5/18/2004 c1 Lost Chi
This story is AMAZING! I loved reading the first chapter, and I can't wait to read the next. YOu should publish this as a book.
P.S. Everyone who reads this, please take a note that I have also wrote a story and I need to get some reviews. The story is called The Pocketwatch (Part 1), so if any of you have time, Please send me a review. I'm desperate!
This story is AMAZING! I loved reading the first chapter, and I can't wait to read the next. YOu should publish this as a book.
P.S. Everyone who reads this, please take a note that I have also wrote a story and I need to get some reviews. The story is called The Pocketwatch (Part 1), so if any of you have time, Please send me a review. I'm desperate!
4/27/2004 c1 Gracey London
Great beginning!
You write very well, but **constructive criticism here :)** the main weakness I noticed was that pacing's a little slow, especially for an online work. That's not saying you should rewrite everything-it's just a honest comment. Your writing's wonderful :D
Kudos to you for writing ::counts:: 23 chapters! Write on!
Great beginning!
You write very well, but **constructive criticism here :)** the main weakness I noticed was that pacing's a little slow, especially for an online work. That's not saying you should rewrite everything-it's just a honest comment. Your writing's wonderful :D
Kudos to you for writing ::counts:: 23 chapters! Write on!
12/23/2003 c23 Abinikai
No! That's so sad! I really liked Pojo!
Well, good job. I do have one complaint, though-it almost seems like you right the story in present tense, then go back and switch it all to past tense. There were a couple times where I found words in the wrong tesne, ect. My advice: get a really good beta. They're always so helpful. I'd offer my services, but I'm a little...busy at the moment. Well, if you take into account how sporadically I review, that could give you a hint at how little free time I have. So yeah-betas are good.
Other then that, it's great. I think you should go a little more in depth on Aria's pain at Lukas's words. I don't have much more to say, other then that you should think of getting this published. You might want to go back over it though-there are a couple places where you have holes in your story and a couple of places where you need more description, etc. Still, when you finish, think of going back over it and sending it to a publisher-just for kicks.
Well, I really have to go. Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year. I'll try to read this more often so that I can keep up with it and review more regularly-but I'm definately not making any promises.
Much love,
Abinikai
No! That's so sad! I really liked Pojo!
Well, good job. I do have one complaint, though-it almost seems like you right the story in present tense, then go back and switch it all to past tense. There were a couple times where I found words in the wrong tesne, ect. My advice: get a really good beta. They're always so helpful. I'd offer my services, but I'm a little...busy at the moment. Well, if you take into account how sporadically I review, that could give you a hint at how little free time I have. So yeah-betas are good.
Other then that, it's great. I think you should go a little more in depth on Aria's pain at Lukas's words. I don't have much more to say, other then that you should think of getting this published. You might want to go back over it though-there are a couple places where you have holes in your story and a couple of places where you need more description, etc. Still, when you finish, think of going back over it and sending it to a publisher-just for kicks.
Well, I really have to go. Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year. I'll try to read this more often so that I can keep up with it and review more regularly-but I'm definately not making any promises.
Much love,
Abinikai
12/15/2003 c23 2AerinBrown
E! Pojo!
The reunions were all sweet, especially Aria and Luke's.
Sorry this is short, but I loved it! Can't wait for the next!
2AerinBrownE! Pojo!
The reunions were all sweet, especially Aria and Luke's.
Sorry this is short, but I loved it! Can't wait for the next!
12/8/2003 c23 9CocoBeans
O no! Pojo! Why on Earth did she creep out in the first place? Aw.. poor thing. *sigh* But, I guess u can't win it all.
However, I'm glad u updated, took a while, but still nice. Again, a few grammatical errors, or typos anyway. Good job! I love this story!
Toodles!
9CocoBeansO no! Pojo! Why on Earth did she creep out in the first place? Aw.. poor thing. *sigh* But, I guess u can't win it all.
However, I'm glad u updated, took a while, but still nice. Again, a few grammatical errors, or typos anyway. Good job! I love this story!
Toodles!
12/5/2003 c23 prantis
thanks soo much for updating!
thanks soo much for updating!