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6/29/2013 c1 6The Final Conduit
(Holds your shoulder) It's alright to feel that way.
7/7/2005 c1 5JCPD
I was quite impressed by this poem. Not only can i relate to the theme, but the manner in which it was presented (mainly the overall rhythm and the way it started and ended with the same line) was excellent as well.
10/4/2003 c1 24Korum
Sounds like you've been there, or at least watched it happen. I can feel the sadness and hurt in it. Very well written.
1/1/2002 c1 48Vinsant Firepsyched
You have described what many people have seen, It's a shame when a marriage doesn't work. Good Job. *Rubs eye to stop the tears*
11/19/2001 c1 Bitterscarlet Yet again
Sounds very personal. I loved the line: 'Your action lacks conscience, my words lack depth.'

That could easily develop into a whole other poem despite the fact it fits in so well here. The last two lines are great too. (There's that word again) I just wonder if the start of that last stanza could rhyme better...maybe something like 'Marriage is void of the love once paired'? Does that make sense to you?

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