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7/1/2003 c1 16RuathaWehrling
Well, the words of this poem are pretty good, but it's REALLY hard to read. Add line breaks before each capitalized word, and it'll help a LOT without losing much. Thanks! :)
12/19/2001 c1 91Sarah Jane Stokes
You said i was talented but i am afraid i will have to turn the tables on you. YOU are truely talented and should not give it up.

~Sarah~
12/13/2001 c1 litebrite
Not bad...the only suggestion I have would to be to add line breaks and punctuation. Hey, thanks for reviewing my poem about ADD, as a poem its not all that great I don't think, but I'm glad you understood the message. It's not fun to have something holding you back and not know about it...and even when you do it's still a struggle. Glad there's someone who understands. Anyway..your poem...I like the idea of thinking about a New Day...there's a lovely Billy Collins poem about the same subject...like I said..really good start..but maybe some punctuation or line breaks to make it more accessible (sp?)

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