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10/6/2007 c1 roalwand
Good description. It is kind of confusing as far as the plot. Please r/r my material at
5/7/2004 c1 30Pretty Fly Jedi
I really liked how you wrote it. It was very descriptive. however, i dont really understand the santa clause thing.
Maybe explain it to me?
7/16/2003 c1 Kurt Wildforster
Lost my interest withing the first two sentences. You need to work on your editing quite a bit. Run it through a grammar check.
11/11/2002 c1 1team-senshi
hmm... I recieved mixed signals from this story. I think I sense many deep messages but can't really pinpoint or prove any one.

The story is poetic in its own right. It seems a bit cold though, I just get a cold feeling from it. It's the emptiness of the girl I suppose. I won't say good work because I can't. I don't understand it's true concept or purpose. But it was well written and it shows there was much thought put into this so I'll say great job doing that.

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