for GemSpirits10/29/2002 c1 
34nathalsa
I like it so far, yes, I do, but a little foreshadowing would be nice for those of us who always read the last pages first! I mean, I don't know if the king's gonna live, die, and if he does die, if she's gonna fall in love with him, or if he stays alive, if she has an affair with him or something...Foreshadowing can tell you all of this, although in subtle ways. Altogether, however, I like it! Keep it up! I'll be watching!
34nathalsaI like it so far, yes, I do, but a little foreshadowing would be nice for those of us who always read the last pages first! I mean, I don't know if the king's gonna live, die, and if he does die, if she's gonna fall in love with him, or if he stays alive, if she has an affair with him or something...Foreshadowing can tell you all of this, although in subtle ways. Altogether, however, I like it! Keep it up! I'll be watching!
9/16/2002 c1 Alex
*her jaw hits desk* SO GREAT! Very nice, Laurel! I like this lots, its a really promising start ^-^, the characters are realistic, u are a great writer, clearly! Let me know if anymore chapters come! PLEASE!
*her jaw hits desk* SO GREAT! Very nice, Laurel! I like this lots, its a really promising start ^-^, the characters are realistic, u are a great writer, clearly! Let me know if anymore chapters come! PLEASE!
7/15/2002 c1 8TennyoAngel711
WRITE MORE! Continue woman, unless u wanna see Allen in a speedo! *shudders*
Van: *shudders* That is a fate worse than death.
I know, well I can't wait for the next chapter, and it took me awhile to review, but I did!
8TennyoAngel711WRITE MORE! Continue woman, unless u wanna see Allen in a speedo! *shudders*
Van: *shudders* That is a fate worse than death.
I know, well I can't wait for the next chapter, and it took me awhile to review, but I did!
5/26/2002 c1 23audi
What are you talking about? It's not boring. Actually, i would like to see some more.
23audiWhat are you talking about? It's not boring. Actually, i would like to see some more.
12/14/2001 c1 Ivy Shingles
Wow nice story! Hurry up and write more *giggle* very strong center role, looks very promising!
Wow nice story! Hurry up and write more *giggle* very strong center role, looks very promising!