for Ebon Wind12/30/2002 c1 
4fahye
You have a nice, smooth style, but a bit rough on the punctuation side in parts... good work on the description, I am usually far too impatient to write much, but yours works well. Plot background obviously well-thought-out. Falom Rai is a cool name, I like it. And I like Rhin too, you can spot him as a potential love interest the moment he walks in.
4fahyeYou have a nice, smooth style, but a bit rough on the punctuation side in parts... good work on the description, I am usually far too impatient to write much, but yours works well. Plot background obviously well-thought-out. Falom Rai is a cool name, I like it. And I like Rhin too, you can spot him as a potential love interest the moment he walks in.
1/20/2002 c6 1Elij
Excellently written! Your writing flows with the fluidity of a motion picture. Your description is so vivid, it is almost as if I were there. I hope there is more to this fantasy.
1ElijExcellently written! Your writing flows with the fluidity of a motion picture. Your description is so vivid, it is almost as if I were there. I hope there is more to this fantasy.
1/19/2002 c6 22Bardic James
I loved that last scene, it was so very sweet, heheh, it's progressing beautifully, and you shouldn't feel bad about the travel chapter, travelling's hard to write about, I've tried, it doesn't work too well. ::Grins:: But you did a good job, regardless.
22Bardic JamesI loved that last scene, it was so very sweet, heheh, it's progressing beautifully, and you shouldn't feel bad about the travel chapter, travelling's hard to write about, I've tried, it doesn't work too well. ::Grins:: But you did a good job, regardless.
1/18/2002 c6 Mina Carlisle
Yea yea yea okay i want more. I can't wait unil the rest of the story unfolds. Unlike the one i have finally got up and i'm still working on chap. 2 so please get more up ember i want to know about the arguement and obviously Alaina and Rhin.
Yea yea yea okay i want more. I can't wait unil the rest of the story unfolds. Unlike the one i have finally got up and i'm still working on chap. 2 so please get more up ember i want to know about the arguement and obviously Alaina and Rhin.
1/18/2002 c6 8Raonaid Luckwell
Leaving us in suspense? Of wonder what the couple was fighting about? Hmm This did flow more easily than your last chapter, but I understand how a few chapters feel pushed.
8Raonaid LuckwellLeaving us in suspense? Of wonder what the couple was fighting about? Hmm This did flow more easily than your last chapter, but I understand how a few chapters feel pushed.
1/13/2002 c5 knife thrower 2 lazy 2 sign in
wak.. I like. I can feel the WAFF. WAFF WAFF, WAFF, WAFF. Yay. I'm about to upload the next chapter. yay.
wak.. I like. I can feel the WAFF. WAFF WAFF, WAFF, WAFF. Yay. I'm about to upload the next chapter. yay.
1/12/2002 c5 Lady GFerguson
I didn't sign in cause i thought it wouldn't let me twice. Great like the way its comeing out. and is there a tinge of romnance between Alaina and Rhin? Well update it soon cause i want to know more about well every thing.
Paige
I didn't sign in cause i thought it wouldn't let me twice. Great like the way its comeing out. and is there a tinge of romnance between Alaina and Rhin? Well update it soon cause i want to know more about well every thing.
Paige
1/11/2002 c5 Raonaid Luckwell
Bah.. everything sounds fine in this chapter to me. And don't worry about having an elf in there on account of me ::laughs:: It's a great story even without one.
Bah.. everything sounds fine in this chapter to me. And don't worry about having an elf in there on account of me ::laughs:: It's a great story even without one.
1/10/2002 c4 knife thrower 2 lazy 2 sign in
Wow! I like this! It gets better and better as we progress!
Wow! I like this! It gets better and better as we progress!
1/7/2002 c4 66Duk
I liked it alot. very nice story devopling. you paint a good picture,descritptive without being dull. all in all a good tale i hope you continue with:)
66DukI liked it alot. very nice story devopling. you paint a good picture,descritptive without being dull. all in all a good tale i hope you continue with:)
1/6/2002 c4 2Ally the Sugar Fairy
I like the world you've created and the characters. Good job so far.
2Ally the Sugar FairyI like the world you've created and the characters. Good job so far.
1/6/2002 c4 22Bardic James
That's awesome, heheh, my friend Raonaid referred me, telling me you were a good writer, and she was right, you paint a beautiful picture, plus, it's very drawing, I don't want it to finish. ::Grins:: Good job.
22Bardic JamesThat's awesome, heheh, my friend Raonaid referred me, telling me you were a good writer, and she was right, you paint a beautiful picture, plus, it's very drawing, I don't want it to finish. ::Grins:: Good job.