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5/18/2002 c1 84Jaclyn
whoa! AMAZING last verse! and great imagery throughout.
1/17/2002 c1 13Azaezel Coerrigan
This is really powerful. I like! It is a little different to follow... interesting. Good work!

~Azaezel~
1/16/2002 c1 9Midnight Strike
wow. that was wonderful
1/15/2002 c1 1Bitterscarlet
The ending: I thought I could sail through time

But i stumbled.

Is so perfect. The imagery is all glorious.
1/9/2002 c1 Nerilka-chan
*claps in apreciation, since she has lost the ability to say anything creative in reviews*
1/9/2002 c1 2dingbats247
wow this is really good! while i read it it is like imagining how it would feel to try to catch a star and hold it in your hands like a cage, expecting the pain.

i think i still want to wait for a bigger poetry collection before looking for a publisher who will take my stuff, and i wouldn't include anything that rhymes. recently i wrote a shakespearean sonnet for an english assignment, the assignment being to write about a "deep" theme. it came out not that deep, but pretty funny..."Nah. Take the couch and get yourself a shrink." is in iambic pentameter.

i'll post it under original poetry.

-the *dingbat* princess
1/9/2002 c1 20Moloko Vellocet
I adore that last line. "I thought I could sail through time/But i stumbled". The little typo makes it even better. I doubt no one has ever felt like this before, but you express it better than half the 'popular' poets. Keep composing -MV

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