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9/4/2017 c1 RenegadeWanderer
I know this is very, very old (18 years!) but something happened to my previous account, but I managed to favorite this (and other stories). I've been busy and struggling with my own life but I had every intention of coming back and giving my thoughts and here I am.

*I really like this because of the mystic for the character and this curious science fictional universe you've created. However, it is just a taste and obviously you never went back to it or never posted after 1999.
*The description is very well done. I had a clear picture in my head of the ship, the surroundings, and the emotion of the characters except it seems the character description is missing? I know she has white hair and the others black and brown. You have an interesting description of the eyes, but nothing physical. You are good at describing a character internally than you are externally. (I'm the same myself) I also very much like the names you have chosen and the way they are spelt. It is very scifi and creative!
*Obviously this is short and I have no idea how much time or effort was put into it, but it comes off as if something is missing. Why does Winter care about Byrom, they basically just met and she knows nothing. Also, why did Towre assign her a bounty only to capture her. There are more questions than answers, which is why it has a mystic about it. The family element was very well explained and her rage at the offer is understandable and logical. I wish there were conditions or an extended version. Sadly no. This story and you as a writer have great potential and I just wanted to express this. I'd give you 5/10.
2/14/2014 c1 xxx1000
Excellent story! Really! The description was perfect, giving me a clear picture. Very good characterization, especially with Winter. A few sentences were worded a bit confusing, but other than that very good piece! (Going in my favorites!)
7/20/2001 c1 9Ice Wolf17
Awesome! I was surprised to see Towre attacking Winter from behind! Great work! Keep on writing!
8/25/2000 c1 that one reader
This is really cool. You should write a sequel.
4/11/2000 c1 Juliet 8
cool. luv it!
4/11/2000 c1 Spong the Mercyless 9
(Senshi Jade will probably know the meaning of this)

God historie. ...Og ka' jeg så få addrssen jeg kan sende din fødselsgave til? :)
4/11/2000 c1 LT TRAINR 10
c000000000l y33333333ahhhhhhhhhhh
4/11/2000 c1 Artemis Eternal Sailor Sun
Yet another great story by Winter! Bravo, my friend!

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