6/27/2012 c5 Confused and disgruntled
Okay, WTF? go back and check the first four chapters. NOW. Then, either fix the problem or burn the whole thing. I don't care if it's discontinued or whatever, but peope still read this stuff. You're a great writer FROM WHAT I CAN ACTUALLY SEE, but the beginning of the book is sorta important to the readers. So please, when you have a little spare time to piss away, PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE just take a few seconds to upload these or delete the story. I can deal with 'unfinished', but 'unstarted' is seriously cruel, even accidentally. Sorry I'm being harsh, but after reading so many half-assed bullshit stories, finding a quality read with such a huge flaw is a tad soul-crushing.
Okay, WTF? go back and check the first four chapters. NOW. Then, either fix the problem or burn the whole thing. I don't care if it's discontinued or whatever, but peope still read this stuff. You're a great writer FROM WHAT I CAN ACTUALLY SEE, but the beginning of the book is sorta important to the readers. So please, when you have a little spare time to piss away, PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE just take a few seconds to upload these or delete the story. I can deal with 'unfinished', but 'unstarted' is seriously cruel, even accidentally. Sorry I'm being harsh, but after reading so many half-assed bullshit stories, finding a quality read with such a huge flaw is a tad soul-crushing.
5/28/2004 c6 light of the heart
i'v just read this story all in one go and i was so disappointed when it stopped. please keep going
i'v just read this story all in one go and i was so disappointed when it stopped. please keep going
2/7/2004 c6 Quinda
Just found this story and I just love it. It's so well written and it's exactly the kind of story I love to read. I've put in onto my fav' stories list right away cause I'm afraid i'll lose it otherwise. Am really hoping you'll update soon,
~Quinda~
Just found this story and I just love it. It's so well written and it's exactly the kind of story I love to read. I've put in onto my fav' stories list right away cause I'm afraid i'll lose it otherwise. Am really hoping you'll update soon,
~Quinda~
7/9/2003 c5 Jessica Halliwell Potter
I love the woman warrior idea, thanks for finally posting this chapter.
I love the woman warrior idea, thanks for finally posting this chapter.
6/29/2003 c5 AnonymousObserver
PLEASE PUT SUBMIT ANOTHER CHAPTER! I LOVE THIS STORY, THEREFORE THE STORY MUST CONTINUE! -holds up a big mallet- Please?
PLEASE PUT SUBMIT ANOTHER CHAPTER! I LOVE THIS STORY, THEREFORE THE STORY MUST CONTINUE! -holds up a big mallet- Please?
4/24/2003 c5 Zeta Beta
It has been a month! PLZ oh plz great aurora borealis write more soon to your wonderful story! I can't wait to read what happens next!
It has been a month! PLZ oh plz great aurora borealis write more soon to your wonderful story! I can't wait to read what happens next!
4/8/2003 c5 FluffyKitty
Hmm...your summary at the begining isnt' the best...BUT THE STORY IS AMAZING! I have really enjoyed this story, and please do not take the lack of reviews as a hinderance on the flow of chapters...This story is really good, and I hope you post again soon!
Hmm...your summary at the begining isnt' the best...BUT THE STORY IS AMAZING! I have really enjoyed this story, and please do not take the lack of reviews as a hinderance on the flow of chapters...This story is really good, and I hope you post again soon!
3/13/2003 c5 allura-blue
WOW! What an amazing story! and cheya and jet are the cutest! Please keep writing, I can't wait for the next chapter!
WOW! What an amazing story! and cheya and jet are the cutest! Please keep writing, I can't wait for the next chapter!
3/3/2003 c5 Denial
This is an awsome story! I love it! You have to update soon. Please?
This is an awsome story! I love it! You have to update soon. Please?
3/2/2003 c1 1Denial1
Alright, I was mildly intested in the story so I clicked. Then I read your disclaimer and decided to sit back and enjoy a good story. After all, anyone using Kero and Paks as character models has to be doing something right. ;) If you like the merc company plot, you might want to check out a book called 'Lady Blade, Lord Fighter'. I can't think of the author though and it would be hard to find unless you go on-line.
Alright, now for the story. I love it! hee hee, okay, I feel like a dork. But seriously, you did a wonderful job making the characters, even the minor ones, come alive in your first chapter. I'm going to have to come back to read the rest but right now I'm running late. gr. And I blame the fact that I *had* to finish the chapter and then I *had* to review it.
Ack, gotta run! Keep writing!
Alright, I was mildly intested in the story so I clicked. Then I read your disclaimer and decided to sit back and enjoy a good story. After all, anyone using Kero and Paks as character models has to be doing something right. ;) If you like the merc company plot, you might want to check out a book called 'Lady Blade, Lord Fighter'. I can't think of the author though and it would be hard to find unless you go on-line.
Alright, now for the story. I love it! hee hee, okay, I feel like a dork. But seriously, you did a wonderful job making the characters, even the minor ones, come alive in your first chapter. I'm going to have to come back to read the rest but right now I'm running late. gr. And I blame the fact that I *had* to finish the chapter and then I *had* to review it.
Ack, gotta run! Keep writing!
3/1/2003 c5 2Miko633
Finally! A new chapter has been posted, yay! Loved the chapter by the way, sounds like the plot is thickening. This is moving along very nicely and I am anxious to see what will happen when the recruits are undercover, please try to post more soon! Till next time ~Miko~
Finally! A new chapter has been posted, yay! Loved the chapter by the way, sounds like the plot is thickening. This is moving along very nicely and I am anxious to see what will happen when the recruits are undercover, please try to post more soon! Till next time ~Miko~
3/1/2003 c2 1crazythorn
I was a bit confused about who exactly K'Chaya was, but a second reading cleared that up. Nice story, but go for some more descriptions and *never* use parentheses for exposition. "Sat (the one in yellow clothes)" is evil. "Sat, the boy in yellow" is much better. If you were going to get this published, you wouldn't have those "PoV" markers. Just a little tweak and PoV is obvious just by reading the text. Nice job, keep up the good work.
I was a bit confused about who exactly K'Chaya was, but a second reading cleared that up. Nice story, but go for some more descriptions and *never* use parentheses for exposition. "Sat (the one in yellow clothes)" is evil. "Sat, the boy in yellow" is much better. If you were going to get this published, you wouldn't have those "PoV" markers. Just a little tweak and PoV is obvious just by reading the text. Nice job, keep up the good work.
1/25/2003 c4 Guest
Please don't have Seth end up like Paks friend Sef, who got killed when Sinthyas atacked the Halveric Fort! PLEEAAASSE!
Please don't have Seth end up like Paks friend Sef, who got killed when Sinthyas atacked the Halveric Fort! PLEEAAASSE!