for Shadows Fail5/7/2002 c1 Ariana3
Awww! How sweet! 'But snowflakes fall like bursts of light,' that was fantastic! Another great poem! :O)
Awww! How sweet! 'But snowflakes fall like bursts of light,' that was fantastic! Another great poem! :O)
3/16/2002 c1 
3aimster mcmudd
this is good..but it kinda left me hanging =) i would just add another stanza..like a really powerful one and go with it!
3aimster mcmuddthis is good..but it kinda left me hanging =) i would just add another stanza..like a really powerful one and go with it!
2/26/2002 c1 eclecticmum
I think this poem helps to evoke a sense of hope following 9/11... perhaps a title like "Shadows Fail" or perhaps something simple (to suit your style of writing-I truly admire your simple spare style) like "Hope"? The light imagery is beautifully inspiring.
I think this poem helps to evoke a sense of hope following 9/11... perhaps a title like "Shadows Fail" or perhaps something simple (to suit your style of writing-I truly admire your simple spare style) like "Hope"? The light imagery is beautifully inspiring.
2/22/2002 c1 141E. Gao
Nice hopeful tone...
I like the image of snowflakes falling 'like bursts of light.' Very poetic and impressive how you made it rhyme naturally (meaning it doesn't sound forced). Good job! ^_^
~EG
141E. GaoNice hopeful tone...
I like the image of snowflakes falling 'like bursts of light.' Very poetic and impressive how you made it rhyme naturally (meaning it doesn't sound forced). Good job! ^_^
~EG
2/19/2002 c1 Ellers
Hey Lilers!
I've decided on your present! You're going to get another review for each of your works from me!
I'm going to try and read ALL of your works again, though probably I won't manage it today. This poem is wonderful, I love it! I really like the line 'But snowflakes fall like bursts of light' because I can just imagine the flashes of white agains the black of darkness.
Great poem, but now I must be going onto the next! Ta ta!
Hey Lilers!
I've decided on your present! You're going to get another review for each of your works from me!
I'm going to try and read ALL of your works again, though probably I won't manage it today. This poem is wonderful, I love it! I really like the line 'But snowflakes fall like bursts of light' because I can just imagine the flashes of white agains the black of darkness.
Great poem, but now I must be going onto the next! Ta ta!
2/16/2002 c1 12All Mighty Terrestrial
The only thing I can come up with for a poem is "Last Whisp of Darkness," but I personally think that's a bad title. Especially for a good poem :)
12All Mighty TerrestrialThe only thing I can come up with for a poem is "Last Whisp of Darkness," but I personally think that's a bad title. Especially for a good poem :)
2/5/2002 c1 2Undraya
very beautiful! I suggest a title maybe that has something to do with a verse of this poem and have something to do with the whole poem. your right it does rhyme! oh and thanks for reviwing my story *wink*
2Undrayavery beautiful! I suggest a title maybe that has something to do with a verse of this poem and have something to do with the whole poem. your right it does rhyme! oh and thanks for reviwing my story *wink*
2/2/2002 c1 Reine
That is such a powerful poem, Choco. I love all your description. I can see it in my mind. You have such talent. Any Language Arts teacher would die to have a student like you.
That is such a powerful poem, Choco. I love all your description. I can see it in my mind. You have such talent. Any Language Arts teacher would die to have a student like you.
2/1/2002 c1 5cquill13
Hi, this was great! It was a bit sad though, sort of. I'm off to read and review the others!
5cquill13Hi, this was great! It was a bit sad though, sort of. I'm off to read and review the others!
1/31/2002 c1 SilverCry
looooove it! Wonderful!
looooove it! Wonderful!
1/31/2002 c1 Lindsay
Claps and smiles, very nice Lily...
Claps and smiles, very nice Lily...
1/30/2002 c1 Devilz01Angel
That was short and sweet.
That was short and sweet.
1/30/2002 c1 Xavi
christ, lils! I've still got tears in my eyes! how can you say that sucks? it's amazing! stupendous! very, very professional! you're an amazing writer. such an awesome, awe-inspiring, inspirational, superb writer. The words are so gorgeously shaped to a sad visual... it's effective, lils. I love it. ~Xavi
christ, lils! I've still got tears in my eyes! how can you say that sucks? it's amazing! stupendous! very, very professional! you're an amazing writer. such an awesome, awe-inspiring, inspirational, superb writer. The words are so gorgeously shaped to a sad visual... it's effective, lils. I love it. ~Xavi