for Daughter of the Desert4/23/2007 c4 ess3sandra
wow, i looked up king tut, i never knew he died so young. amazing what history can tell you. i like the idea of her meeting him. you erite very well and you draw the reading into your story almost like magic. i like that!
wow, i looked up king tut, i never knew he died so young. amazing what history can tell you. i like the idea of her meeting him. you erite very well and you draw the reading into your story almost like magic. i like that!
4/23/2007 c3 ess3sandra
she was taken prisoner, will the pharao buy her? i am hooked line and sinker i just have to read more, sorr for to reviewing more, it is just so good!
she was taken prisoner, will the pharao buy her? i am hooked line and sinker i just have to read more, sorr for to reviewing more, it is just so good!
4/23/2007 c2 ess3sandra
is there a man, a woman laying out there? i must say i am utterly curious, the more i read, the more i get pulled into the story. i create sad dunes and powerful men in white clothes, as for the title daughter of the destert, it really is a betiful name, is it rewally Kilitatarah? i mena sdoes it mean that?
is there a man, a woman laying out there? i must say i am utterly curious, the more i read, the more i get pulled into the story. i create sad dunes and powerful men in white clothes, as for the title daughter of the destert, it really is a betiful name, is it rewally Kilitatarah? i mena sdoes it mean that?
4/23/2007 c1 ess3sandra
hello alexia (and your a godess too fancy that), i ma intrigued by your story. i guess you are intrested in egyptiology as well, well i am, and this is bound to be intresting! yes indeed!
hello alexia (and your a godess too fancy that), i ma intrigued by your story. i guess you are intrested in egyptiology as well, well i am, and this is bound to be intresting! yes indeed!
1/18/2007 c14 Aytheria
Well, your writing and grammar has taken such a drastic turn from the first few chapters! I'm amazed! And also very grateful. This was a beautiful fic. I read a book once "The Reluctant God" if you haven't read it, you should, it's similar to this in a way, but when I saw this fic I knew I simply HAD to read it. And it did not dissapoint me. Lovely. ^^ Not to mention that Egypt is, of course, the coolest ancient civilization out there. Which makes the fic even better. I loved reading about all the outfits you described, I think that really brought everything to life, the detailed attention you paid to the setting. Anyway, I must go search out the sequal then! :)
Well, your writing and grammar has taken such a drastic turn from the first few chapters! I'm amazed! And also very grateful. This was a beautiful fic. I read a book once "The Reluctant God" if you haven't read it, you should, it's similar to this in a way, but when I saw this fic I knew I simply HAD to read it. And it did not dissapoint me. Lovely. ^^ Not to mention that Egypt is, of course, the coolest ancient civilization out there. Which makes the fic even better. I loved reading about all the outfits you described, I think that really brought everything to life, the detailed attention you paid to the setting. Anyway, I must go search out the sequal then! :)
1/18/2007 c2 Aytheria
wonderful story, though you have one huge flaw in your writing. You constantly switch between verb tenses; present and past. This is not good form. You write in only ONE tense, and if you start out in past then stick to it, or the entire story sounds wrong and grammatically incorrect. However, everything else is very good, and I can managed to wade my way through the verbs, though it makes it very difficult to read and less enjoyable. I really would suggest correcting this, as it A) increases your own command of the english language and B) makes it a better story overall for everyone. Anyway, I hope you take my suggestions into consideration. Otherwise, nice job. :)
wonderful story, though you have one huge flaw in your writing. You constantly switch between verb tenses; present and past. This is not good form. You write in only ONE tense, and if you start out in past then stick to it, or the entire story sounds wrong and grammatically incorrect. However, everything else is very good, and I can managed to wade my way through the verbs, though it makes it very difficult to read and less enjoyable. I really would suggest correcting this, as it A) increases your own command of the english language and B) makes it a better story overall for everyone. Anyway, I hope you take my suggestions into consideration. Otherwise, nice job. :)
9/13/2006 c14 
6Amoreaero
OMG! Such a sad ending! Wah! Anyways I really loved this one, it's probably one of the few stories I read until the end. :)
6AmoreaeroOMG! Such a sad ending! Wah! Anyways I really loved this one, it's probably one of the few stories I read until the end. :)
8/16/2006 c4 earlkgm
I would hate to have my hair that long to. I can barely stand my hair past my shoulders.
I would hate to have my hair that long to. I can barely stand my hair past my shoulders.
8/16/2006 c2 earlkgm
I wish I had a laptop like that! what does her father do? and why does he think things like that to her?
I wish I had a laptop like that! what does her father do? and why does he think things like that to her?