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1/5/2006 c1 17noche
Are you going to finish this? Or is is complete already? It feels more like a cliffhanger than an end to a story. It doesn't feel complete.

Then again... This was in 2002. But it would be great if you wrote more of it.
2/3/2004 c1 carmice3
Very subtle. I can't tell if the rebels won or not, but I think your point is that every one has lost; as their minds are reprogrammed to make them efficient, and as a side effect they have lost their uniqueness.
I do like it.
2/26/2002 c1 3Tiffany Kremer
You have really good dialogue, you also describe them pretty well too. My only criticism is to describe the setting a bit, put the dialogue and your characters someplace. But other than that, it's a good peice of writing.
2/25/2002 c1 6Strider Hunter
Interesting beginning...not as zany as your other stories. Good amount of sci-fi so far, we'll have to wait for the horror element to kick in.

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