for Not a Haiku5/14/2003 c5 
54Werecat99
Interesting question, that first line...
Loved this one too, although the previous poems were more powerful.
54Werecat99Interesting question, that first line...
Loved this one too, although the previous poems were more powerful.
5/14/2003 c4 Werecat99
Same goes with this pair. I guess I have an affiliation with the darker aspects of life.
I really liked the difference between the two and how it ends with the promise of pain.
Good work.
Same goes with this pair. I guess I have an affiliation with the darker aspects of life.
I really liked the difference between the two and how it ends with the promise of pain.
Good work.
5/14/2003 c3 Werecat99
I liked these as well. Especially the secong one. That last line brought it to life so suddenly it hurts.
Thanks for the reviews.
I liked these as well. Especially the secong one. That last line brought it to life so suddenly it hurts.
Thanks for the reviews.
5/7/2003 c2 Werecat99
The first thing that came to my mind was 'death'. But that's just my evil twisted mind.
I think I'll choose 'purpose' from your list.
PS
Thanks for the reviews.
The first thing that came to my mind was 'death'. But that's just my evil twisted mind.
I think I'll choose 'purpose' from your list.
PS
Thanks for the reviews.
5/7/2003 c1 Werecat99
I liked that. I'm not sure if I have understood it, but I thought it was dark and beautiful.
I liked that. I'm not sure if I have understood it, but I thought it was dark and beautiful.
3/12/2003 c1 13theblindman
.give it *nought*?
Feh, I like rhyming too much. I also approve of love. More than one syllable would sound weird.
I like the second last one the most. Laziness or compassion. Damn brilliant-sounding, not sure if it makes sense though.
In other news: this is good, thanks for the reviews, blah-bitty-hey-diddy-nah-ninny-noh.
tbm
13theblindman.give it *nought*?
Feh, I like rhyming too much. I also approve of love. More than one syllable would sound weird.
I like the second last one the most. Laziness or compassion. Damn brilliant-sounding, not sure if it makes sense though.
In other news: this is good, thanks for the reviews, blah-bitty-hey-diddy-nah-ninny-noh.
tbm
9/26/2002 c5 47Skivverus
Interesting; kind of funny, and philosophical, all of these. Second line, might want to do something jarring in that blank to wake people up. The rest I'm just too lazy to go back and make constructive comments on, except for the one I'm looking at right now. "Quench my thirst" as a command? Wait a second... just wondering if the person is feeling tyrannical when this is written/said.
47SkivverusInteresting; kind of funny, and philosophical, all of these. Second line, might want to do something jarring in that blank to wake people up. The rest I'm just too lazy to go back and make constructive comments on, except for the one I'm looking at right now. "Quench my thirst" as a command? Wait a second... just wondering if the person is feeling tyrannical when this is written/said.
5/16/2002 c1 DeeEe IT'S ME I SWEAR
I did layer words sad hmm? Oh and Lauren is my name. Forgot to take it out. When I typed them I had some by me and some by my friend. To keep track of them I put our names below it. When I cut/pasted forgot to delete names.
I did layer words sad hmm? Oh and Lauren is my name. Forgot to take it out. When I typed them I had some by me and some by my friend. To keep track of them I put our names below it. When I cut/pasted forgot to delete names.
5/11/2002 c5 55Fire of the Vampire
Very cool. I like these, but what's with the name "Lauren" appearing in some of them? I didn't understand that part. In the second one, chapter two, I think the word in the blank should be mercy. It sounds good like that. But overall, I like these. Those magnetic poetry sets never have enough words. I want a set!
God Bless
Much Love
Later Daze
- Kacie
55Fire of the VampireVery cool. I like these, but what's with the name "Lauren" appearing in some of them? I didn't understand that part. In the second one, chapter two, I think the word in the blank should be mercy. It sounds good like that. But overall, I like these. Those magnetic poetry sets never have enough words. I want a set!
God Bless
Much Love
Later Daze
- Kacie
3/28/2002 c5 14Tea Bush
I do not have enough time to express what I feel (gotta learn freakin' calculus). But your poetry's great. 'Laziness or compassion'? Marvellous!
~Mike the Tea Bushman
14Tea BushI do not have enough time to express what I feel (gotta learn freakin' calculus). But your poetry's great. 'Laziness or compassion'? Marvellous!
~Mike the Tea Bushman
3/28/2002 c2 Tea Bush
Purpose is quite good. Though, I would rather say 'nothing'. Life becomes interesting only after you start making it interesting. You. Yourself. Not somebody named Fortune.
~Mike the Tea Bushman
Purpose is quite good. Though, I would rather say 'nothing'. Life becomes interesting only after you start making it interesting. You. Yourself. Not somebody named Fortune.
~Mike the Tea Bushman
3/25/2002 c2 16i heart blood
Well, I think purpose sounds pretty good, but then again, love would be fine & dandy too. Or maybe even hope. Or maybe I'm not really helping, am I? *shrug* Anyway, I liked your poems! ^.^
16i heart bloodWell, I think purpose sounds pretty good, but then again, love would be fine & dandy too. Or maybe even hope. Or maybe I'm not really helping, am I? *shrug* Anyway, I liked your poems! ^.^