for Darkness9/2/2002 c1 
23Matthew Espinoza
Wow. That was deep. I liked it. I don't care for the rhyme scheme, and there are a few typos, but it is good. I hope to see more. Maybe blue darkness? Eh? EH? LOL. Ok. Bye.
Daren
23Matthew EspinozaWow. That was deep. I liked it. I don't care for the rhyme scheme, and there are a few typos, but it is good. I hope to see more. Maybe blue darkness? Eh? EH? LOL. Ok. Bye.
Daren
8/2/2002 c1 21Bobo
Wow, we write like... the same regular angsty stuff... Amazing. Well, I realized that you have reviewd alot of my poetry, like no one else, so I decided to return the favour, and read yours. This poem was really well written, but being the way I am, I'm REALLY sorry, but I think that the "your" in the third line is supposed to be "you're", as in "you are witheres, lonely, and afraid". Oh well, I am really sorry, but I can't help but edit things. But if you really are like me, you won't give a damn, and be too lazy to fix the problem. :p Anywho, I've got some more of your stuff to read! Keep writing! ~ Bobo ~
21BoboWow, we write like... the same regular angsty stuff... Amazing. Well, I realized that you have reviewd alot of my poetry, like no one else, so I decided to return the favour, and read yours. This poem was really well written, but being the way I am, I'm REALLY sorry, but I think that the "your" in the third line is supposed to be "you're", as in "you are witheres, lonely, and afraid". Oh well, I am really sorry, but I can't help but edit things. But if you really are like me, you won't give a damn, and be too lazy to fix the problem. :p Anywho, I've got some more of your stuff to read! Keep writing! ~ Bobo ~
8/1/2002 c1 Sharyn1
I didn't like this one as much as your other poems and just a little grammar error in the last line, "Now you're really alone" not "Now, your really alone" nothing much.
I didn't like this one as much as your other poems and just a little grammar error in the last line, "Now you're really alone" not "Now, your really alone" nothing much.
5/12/2002 c1 26annakas
Wow I wish i could write such a good petry. I love dark poems. Dont know why but I really really love them!
26annakasWow I wish i could write such a good petry. I love dark poems. Dont know why but I really really love them!
5/5/2002 c1 65Maria Gv
hmmm... it seems to be saying to me.. that a person trying to find something better for themselves was let down.. or you reach for something you think is good something that will help you in life.. but once you get so close to it.. you realize it's not good and it harms you much much more. How true that can be sometimes.. sometimes the darkness is a good thing. ^_~
65Maria Gvhmmm... it seems to be saying to me.. that a person trying to find something better for themselves was let down.. or you reach for something you think is good something that will help you in life.. but once you get so close to it.. you realize it's not good and it harms you much much more. How true that can be sometimes.. sometimes the darkness is a good thing. ^_~
4/13/2002 c1 24Isabella1
Good poem. All of your work seems to be dark, but it's great work so keep it up. I like this one the most though. Great Job and don't ever lose your talent.
24Isabella1Good poem. All of your work seems to be dark, but it's great work so keep it up. I like this one the most though. Great Job and don't ever lose your talent.
3/24/2002 c1 25Poet17says
Nice poem, i like the way you put both the darkness and the light on equal levels. Well thats what i think, dont mind me!
25Poet17saysNice poem, i like the way you put both the darkness and the light on equal levels. Well thats what i think, dont mind me!