
10/9/2002 c1
33Arella Ashkenazic
Very nice :o) It could use a few touches to the plot and to the setup, but the storyline flowed very well. You might try considering adding more detail to the character personalities, if you ever edit this piece.

Very nice :o) It could use a few touches to the plot and to the setup, but the storyline flowed very well. You might try considering adding more detail to the character personalities, if you ever edit this piece.
3/27/2002 c1 Llyxius
Are you in creative writing, or are you just really creative? (I know that's a weird question. @[email protected]) This just reminds me of something a creative writing teacher would love as an assignment, that's the reason I ask (I'm in CW myself at the moment). Sheesh, I need to stop talking in parentheses. I saw your bio that you're a homeschooler, so I bet that has something to do with it. I used to be homeschooled, and while I can make no claims to intelligence since I went back to public school after a few years, my home-schooled friends stayed smart. *insane grin* Sorry this review is mostly a ramble and not really about the story, but I really liked it! Very clever plot, and I like the last two paragraphs. ^^
Are you in creative writing, or are you just really creative? (I know that's a weird question. @[email protected]) This just reminds me of something a creative writing teacher would love as an assignment, that's the reason I ask (I'm in CW myself at the moment). Sheesh, I need to stop talking in parentheses. I saw your bio that you're a homeschooler, so I bet that has something to do with it. I used to be homeschooled, and while I can make no claims to intelligence since I went back to public school after a few years, my home-schooled friends stayed smart. *insane grin* Sorry this review is mostly a ramble and not really about the story, but I really liked it! Very clever plot, and I like the last two paragraphs. ^^