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3/18/2007 c1 174a silenced revolution
That's amazing. The line "the song is over" is an incredibly powerful metaphor.

"A wave of shocking silence

carries me away"

It's wonderful, dark and descriptive. I don't know what else to say. You've perfectly captured something as complex as death in seventeen syllables. Keep writing!
5/3/2006 c1 593Morwain
short and too the point but not lacking the nessacery desprictions
4/30/2006 c1 65Aquafied
depressing reallybut i am addicted to this

(hah. if i tried to speak to you in german, you would be crying out of laughter

really now, no need to have a mess up over that. gaga, crazy, whatever. just made me laugh)
4/30/2006 c1 51Kusje
Mm. I love the haiku's. I wrote like 1 Haiku, and it sucked..
4/29/2006 c1 131theory of black
beautiful.
4/7/2006 c1 2SinCorazon
"a wave of shocking silence" - that's exactly what I feel when I hear about someone I know who's died.
4/11/2005 c1 22Loup17
most people i know can't write a haiku to save their life, at least not a good one, yet you manage to pull it off

JA~

PS that is DARK, next time capitilize the summary
1/15/2004 c1 127godawful teen-angst poetry
Ugh, this hits close to home...sorry, this is a bit hard for me to review. You've perfectly captured the essence of death...grief...sorry. This is...you're amazing. Sorry if this review makes little sense.
~lyv
11/15/2003 c1 6Tatterdemalion
Beautiful stuff.

So simple to see what you mean, yet very moving all the same...
11/9/2003 c1 18Indecisive
Simple, but i guess very realistic! good on you!
11/8/2003 c1 186Emi Amara
hiya! cool,

it makes me picture just a silent crowd. i'm wrong, aren't i? o well, better luck next time! good haiku!

cya =)

-winged girl
11/8/2003 c1 agny
You're a goth, aren't you?
11/7/2003 c1 28frugale
Good, breathtaking.
8/9/2003 c1 48Sun Chime
That's a really strange way of dying. Mystifying images form in your head. Beautiful.
7/8/2003 c1 greenfroggies
WOW...and, um...more WOW!

i love this, would you mind if i printed it out (with your name on of course) to stick on my bedroom wall?
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