for Legends No Nihon9/4/2002 c17 CinderScar
Wow, that was fun! ^-^ That was, as always, a happy happy happy happy really really really really good good good good and and and and cool cool cool cool chapter! Raider is really really really cool cool cool, and I really enjoyed reading this! I'm soooooo happy that you put up a chapter after SOOOOOO FREAK'N LONG! Sankyuuuuuuuuuuu! And the nihongo was pretttttty good, though there's another word for fiance that you miiiiight wanna use. i don remember what it was, tho. lol. and there goes my grammer. Weeeellll... ja ne! And if you don't update... DOOM WILL FALL UPON SEI-CHAN!
Excellent Chapter, fun to read, all-over cool
-Luke
(Am i ANNOYING? ^-^)
Wow, that was fun! ^-^ That was, as always, a happy happy happy happy really really really really good good good good and and and and cool cool cool cool chapter! Raider is really really really cool cool cool, and I really enjoyed reading this! I'm soooooo happy that you put up a chapter after SOOOOOO FREAK'N LONG! Sankyuuuuuuuuuuu! And the nihongo was pretttttty good, though there's another word for fiance that you miiiiight wanna use. i don remember what it was, tho. lol. and there goes my grammer. Weeeellll... ja ne! And if you don't update... DOOM WILL FALL UPON SEI-CHAN!
Excellent Chapter, fun to read, all-over cool
-Luke
(Am i ANNOYING? ^-^)
8/19/2002 c15 
15Apple Kinder
This made me laugh.alot. it was beautifully written and I couldn't find anyting wrong with it. I'm afraid this is as far as I got. I LOVE Raider, can I have him? He's so cute in this chappie( insolent fool) hehe. Will r&r more later.promise
~Chidori
15Apple KinderThis made me laugh.alot. it was beautifully written and I couldn't find anyting wrong with it. I'm afraid this is as far as I got. I LOVE Raider, can I have him? He's so cute in this chappie( insolent fool) hehe. Will r&r more later.promise
~Chidori
8/17/2002 c16 Cinder Scar the Lazy Torturer of Squeemish Shikaan Elves
YAY! 50!1
That was yet another GREAT chapter! Go Keebler! I really liked this one, and the characters were, again, cool. The dialogue was good, and the descriptions were neat! *three thumbs up* Wait... I only have 2 thumbs! Ah well! ^-^;;;;; MORE! MORE!
(BTW, it's 'soko da', and 'doko da', not de. K? Japanese grammer police, I know. ^-^)
YAY! 50!1
That was yet another GREAT chapter! Go Keebler! I really liked this one, and the characters were, again, cool. The dialogue was good, and the descriptions were neat! *three thumbs up* Wait... I only have 2 thumbs! Ah well! ^-^;;;;; MORE! MORE!
(BTW, it's 'soko da', and 'doko da', not de. K? Japanese grammer police, I know. ^-^)
8/7/2002 c15 cinder scar who is waaaaay to lazy for his own good
Yay! Go Nyhkerr, go Raider! That was an AWESOME 15 chappie there, Keebler! You HAVE to write more! I can't wait to find out what's gonna happen next! (Did the other reviews ever come in? No? Damn thing...) You're really goo,d and I liked the character interaction between N & R in this chapter, especially. You go, gal!
Yay! Go Nyhkerr, go Raider! That was an AWESOME 15 chappie there, Keebler! You HAVE to write more! I can't wait to find out what's gonna happen next! (Did the other reviews ever come in? No? Damn thing...) You're really goo,d and I liked the character interaction between N & R in this chapter, especially. You go, gal!
7/17/2002 c14 1Little Ucchan
Ooooooooooooooooh. Raider's gonna get it! I honestly hope he doesn't (at least not too badly), b/c I kinda like the guy. Plus, Psyver was definately acting like a 'witch' (change the first letter). Although I do admit, Skliros HAD that coming. Of all the arrogant pompous jerks I've seen to date, that topped it right there. And I'm wondering about Psyver's motives. It most have been on the lines of having her cake and eat it too. Of beating the crap out of Skliros for his actions and also raising her ranks considerably instead of having to wait forever to reach to top 15 ranks. But I really wonder how Raider's next encounter with the infamous Psyver Iki-Jigoku will be like. Well placed punch btw. ^_^ Ja ne!
1Little UcchanOoooooooooooooooh. Raider's gonna get it! I honestly hope he doesn't (at least not too badly), b/c I kinda like the guy. Plus, Psyver was definately acting like a 'witch' (change the first letter). Although I do admit, Skliros HAD that coming. Of all the arrogant pompous jerks I've seen to date, that topped it right there. And I'm wondering about Psyver's motives. It most have been on the lines of having her cake and eat it too. Of beating the crap out of Skliros for his actions and also raising her ranks considerably instead of having to wait forever to reach to top 15 ranks. But I really wonder how Raider's next encounter with the infamous Psyver Iki-Jigoku will be like. Well placed punch btw. ^_^ Ja ne!
7/17/2002 c13 Little Ucchan
O_O You dedicated this chapter to ME! ::squeals:: Ahem. Okay, okay, I'll stop acting all childing and girly or whatnow. ^_^ But... THANK YOU! ^_^ I'm flattered. Really.
Okay! First order of business in the beginning of a very LOOOOONG review. I'd like to apologize. Found out why you used the last four (or was it five?) names in the last chapter. Veeeeery slick. I shouldn't have jumped the gun like that. But the fact that I caught that showed some good writing skills on your part. So I was able to make the connection in this chapter. AHHHHHH! Nyhkerr was MOBBED! Damn paparazi(sp?) press. But that was cool! I LOVED the fight. Gruesome. But I think after 13 chapters into the story, I'm used to it by now. Slightly. Opening line was classic though. ^_^ O_O Oh he's sooooo sweet! ^^;; Ignore my random outbursts okay. Question! Refresh my memory, did you just introduce Raider in this chapter or did you mention him before? Just wondering. I like his personality. Maybe because I feel I have an affiliation with wolves. ::shrugs:: I think they're cool. But I dunno, he seems 'strange' for lack of better words to describe it but sweet and kinda a ladies man but not really, if you get what I mean. I LIKE the water bucket! ^_^ Water + splash = fun. ^-^ And is Raider a pyro boy? Or is he just accident prone? What I liked was when Hunter came in. Because of the scene with Kalee, I was able to connect Hunter with that odd fellow that she and Nyhkerr thought looked familiar way waaaaaaaay early on in the fic when they were first introduced. ^_^ I like it when I finally figure out who certain mysterious characters are. Oh and Gond's line towards the end... ::snickers::... MUAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHHA! ROTFLOL! ^_^ I loved it! It ROCKED soooo badly! ^_^ Nice timing! ::still laughing as I go off to read the next chapter::
O_O You dedicated this chapter to ME! ::squeals:: Ahem. Okay, okay, I'll stop acting all childing and girly or whatnow. ^_^ But... THANK YOU! ^_^ I'm flattered. Really.
Okay! First order of business in the beginning of a very LOOOOONG review. I'd like to apologize. Found out why you used the last four (or was it five?) names in the last chapter. Veeeeery slick. I shouldn't have jumped the gun like that. But the fact that I caught that showed some good writing skills on your part. So I was able to make the connection in this chapter. AHHHHHH! Nyhkerr was MOBBED! Damn paparazi(sp?) press. But that was cool! I LOVED the fight. Gruesome. But I think after 13 chapters into the story, I'm used to it by now. Slightly. Opening line was classic though. ^_^ O_O Oh he's sooooo sweet! ^^;; Ignore my random outbursts okay. Question! Refresh my memory, did you just introduce Raider in this chapter or did you mention him before? Just wondering. I like his personality. Maybe because I feel I have an affiliation with wolves. ::shrugs:: I think they're cool. But I dunno, he seems 'strange' for lack of better words to describe it but sweet and kinda a ladies man but not really, if you get what I mean. I LIKE the water bucket! ^_^ Water + splash = fun. ^-^ And is Raider a pyro boy? Or is he just accident prone? What I liked was when Hunter came in. Because of the scene with Kalee, I was able to connect Hunter with that odd fellow that she and Nyhkerr thought looked familiar way waaaaaaaay early on in the fic when they were first introduced. ^_^ I like it when I finally figure out who certain mysterious characters are. Oh and Gond's line towards the end... ::snickers::... MUAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHHA! ROTFLOL! ^_^ I loved it! It ROCKED soooo badly! ^_^ Nice timing! ::still laughing as I go off to read the next chapter::
7/17/2002 c12 Little Ucchan
AHHHHHHHHHHHHH! NYHKERR! ^_^ That's it! I officially claim him as MINE! MUAHAHAHAAHAHAHHAHA! =)
::suddenly going back to normal 'reviewer' mode:: Ahem! Anyway... ^_^ I REALLY like how you set up the personality differences between Nyhkerr and Kalee. I saw it in the beginning, but this chapter made it a LOT more obvious. Not to mention fun. I bet you had a blast writing this. I think you mentioned before how you like writing about Nyhkerr and his sister just b/c it's fun. And it seemed like it too. I swear, it just radiated from the chapter. No fooling. But then again, I might have all praise and worship for this chapter b/c I'm biased (but we already knew that). ^_^ AHHHHHHHHHH! HE'S SOOOO CUUUUUUTE! ::goes back to reviewer mode:: There is one thing that kinda irked me, but since you wanted me to tell you what irked me I'll go ahead. It's no real biggie. Just a small paragraph towards the end of Kalee's fight when you mentioned the names of the last five or so fighters as the Egyptian tore them down. It just kinda bugged me/stood out b/c you never mentioned the other competitiors names (well, you couldn't really since there were so many) but you did for the last. Again, it's not really big, it just distracted me for a moment. Just wanted to tell you. Other than that, I LOVED IT! Or rather, should I say I loved 'him.' ^_~
AHHHHHHHHHHHHH! NYHKERR! ^_^ That's it! I officially claim him as MINE! MUAHAHAHAAHAHAHHAHA! =)
::suddenly going back to normal 'reviewer' mode:: Ahem! Anyway... ^_^ I REALLY like how you set up the personality differences between Nyhkerr and Kalee. I saw it in the beginning, but this chapter made it a LOT more obvious. Not to mention fun. I bet you had a blast writing this. I think you mentioned before how you like writing about Nyhkerr and his sister just b/c it's fun. And it seemed like it too. I swear, it just radiated from the chapter. No fooling. But then again, I might have all praise and worship for this chapter b/c I'm biased (but we already knew that). ^_^ AHHHHHHHHHH! HE'S SOOOO CUUUUUUTE! ::goes back to reviewer mode:: There is one thing that kinda irked me, but since you wanted me to tell you what irked me I'll go ahead. It's no real biggie. Just a small paragraph towards the end of Kalee's fight when you mentioned the names of the last five or so fighters as the Egyptian tore them down. It just kinda bugged me/stood out b/c you never mentioned the other competitiors names (well, you couldn't really since there were so many) but you did for the last. Again, it's not really big, it just distracted me for a moment. Just wanted to tell you. Other than that, I LOVED IT! Or rather, should I say I loved 'him.' ^_~
7/17/2002 c11 Little Ucchan
Hi Keebler! O_O -_- Man, I haven't been here in a long time. Gomen. ^^;; My schedule, even for summer, is just screwey. But the bright side is that I get to read more of your story! Apologize again for not getting this review to you before I left last week. ^^;; I got... distracted. Anywho, on to the review!
Hmm... blind competitor with a few tricks up his sleeve. Innovative. Creative. ^_^ Curious as to how Psyver was going to deal with him if only time didn't run out on her. So, what it sirens or echoes? Or are you going to be your crazy self and reveal that later? ^_^ Seriously though, I didn't expect them to be hanging around the tournament grounds, especially with the little info insert you put at the end. Could it be that they have some hidden agenda that would lure them from their usual home? ^^;; Or I could be imagining things. Where is the tournament located again? Refresh my memory. I liked the overlap of time from the previous chapter. Veeeery smooth. I didn't see anything that needed improvement. I just had a bit of trouble following what happened with the sirens/echoes until I read it a second time. ^^;; I haven't been reading in a while. Sorry. Must have been loss of concentration. I like your attention to detail and am curious about the relationship between Tyco and Psyver, which, I'm hoping, will be explained some time in the near future. Keep up the good work! ^_^ Ja ne!
Hi Keebler! O_O -_- Man, I haven't been here in a long time. Gomen. ^^;; My schedule, even for summer, is just screwey. But the bright side is that I get to read more of your story! Apologize again for not getting this review to you before I left last week. ^^;; I got... distracted. Anywho, on to the review!
Hmm... blind competitor with a few tricks up his sleeve. Innovative. Creative. ^_^ Curious as to how Psyver was going to deal with him if only time didn't run out on her. So, what it sirens or echoes? Or are you going to be your crazy self and reveal that later? ^_^ Seriously though, I didn't expect them to be hanging around the tournament grounds, especially with the little info insert you put at the end. Could it be that they have some hidden agenda that would lure them from their usual home? ^^;; Or I could be imagining things. Where is the tournament located again? Refresh my memory. I liked the overlap of time from the previous chapter. Veeeery smooth. I didn't see anything that needed improvement. I just had a bit of trouble following what happened with the sirens/echoes until I read it a second time. ^^;; I haven't been reading in a while. Sorry. Must have been loss of concentration. I like your attention to detail and am curious about the relationship between Tyco and Psyver, which, I'm hoping, will be explained some time in the near future. Keep up the good work! ^_^ Ja ne!
7/15/2002 c6 8Cinnabar Scarlett
oooh! Cool! David was neat! That was a good chapter! Yatta! Ch. 33 of Eruune is up. I think.. Yeah! That was a really awesome chapter! The dialogue was really great, and the ending was suspenceful. What happens to poor David-kun? Waaaaiii!
8Cinnabar Scarlettoooh! Cool! David was neat! That was a good chapter! Yatta! Ch. 33 of Eruune is up. I think.. Yeah! That was a really awesome chapter! The dialogue was really great, and the ending was suspenceful. What happens to poor David-kun? Waaaaiii!
7/15/2002 c5 Cinnabar Scarlett
Haa! Less lazy this time, ne? Great work! It was really cool! Yay! Chibi-lain is satisfied! It's really great to read everything again, you know. Yay! Yay! YAY! I really liked this chapter, but agian I like them all! ^-^
Keep writing, else Chibi Lain will be MAD!
Haa! Less lazy this time, ne? Great work! It was really cool! Yay! Chibi-lain is satisfied! It's really great to read everything again, you know. Yay! Yay! YAY! I really liked this chapter, but agian I like them all! ^-^
Keep writing, else Chibi Lain will be MAD!
7/15/2002 c4 Cinny
again, Chibi-lain didn't sign in. Ah well. This was a cool chapter. You're writing is very much better than most people's on this site! hAaaaa! Gak. Anyway, it was really really cool, and if you don't write more, Chibi-Lain the Angry will punish you! AHAAAA! Good chapter!
again, Chibi-lain didn't sign in. Ah well. This was a cool chapter. You're writing is very much better than most people's on this site! hAaaaa! Gak. Anyway, it was really really cool, and if you don't write more, Chibi-Lain the Angry will punish you! AHAAAA! Good chapter!
7/15/2002 c2 Cinnabar Scarlett
too lazy to sighn in. ^-^ Yay! Good chapter! I like the characters, and it was really well-written. More more more!
too lazy to sighn in. ^-^ Yay! Good chapter! I like the characters, and it was really well-written. More more more!
6/6/2002 c10 68Neko-chan1
Ooooooooo...love it! This is getting REALLY good and I SO cannot wait for more! *hint hint* *biiiiiiiig grin* Anyway, keep up the amazing story and please update really, really, REALLY soon! *hint hint nudge wink*
~Neko-chan
P.S.-Chappie 8 of Dragon's Lady is finally up! Whoo hoo! Okay, it sucks...but I hope you like it. ^_^
68Neko-chan1Ooooooooo...love it! This is getting REALLY good and I SO cannot wait for more! *hint hint* *biiiiiiiig grin* Anyway, keep up the amazing story and please update really, really, REALLY soon! *hint hint nudge wink*
~Neko-chan
P.S.-Chappie 8 of Dragon's Lady is finally up! Whoo hoo! Okay, it sucks...but I hope you like it. ^_^
6/3/2002 c10 102Twilight Moon
Wow, this was an amazing story. You have an amazing way with words, and the description was wonderful. This is some of the most descriptive, best stuff on this site. Great job!
102Twilight MoonWow, this was an amazing story. You have an amazing way with words, and the description was wonderful. This is some of the most descriptive, best stuff on this site. Great job!
5/28/2002 c10 1Little Ucchan
Okay. It might just be me. You know, with my phobia of really looooong run-on paragraphs with many many descriptions and information packed into one. :;sigh:: Poe wrote like that. Didn't really follow his stuff either. But, like Poe, when you break it down, the plot, info, imagery, ect, is shocking. I like the way you describe your characters, although the device Tyco had was hard to follow. More spacing, maybe? C'mon! Have pity on us simpletons! =P My main pet peeve is the hard-to-followness of your information. Sometimes you write really well, like the first half up to when you got into Tyco's little gizmo. And then you lose me. I realize that your style is the precise type. No BSing like what i do. You're clear cut, to the point, and very informative, but again, it's hard for all of it to sink in. You need your writing to be more... striking. So events, information, and whatnot stays longer with the reader. Like how Psyver treated Raih... ::snickers::... now that scene, i just pulled off the top of my head. Nicely done btw. Didn't know they were... passionate. And you used the name Seiji? Gee... i wonder... J/k. But then again, this is all my opinion. Write the way that best suits you. But improvement is always a plus.
1Little UcchanOkay. It might just be me. You know, with my phobia of really looooong run-on paragraphs with many many descriptions and information packed into one. :;sigh:: Poe wrote like that. Didn't really follow his stuff either. But, like Poe, when you break it down, the plot, info, imagery, ect, is shocking. I like the way you describe your characters, although the device Tyco had was hard to follow. More spacing, maybe? C'mon! Have pity on us simpletons! =P My main pet peeve is the hard-to-followness of your information. Sometimes you write really well, like the first half up to when you got into Tyco's little gizmo. And then you lose me. I realize that your style is the precise type. No BSing like what i do. You're clear cut, to the point, and very informative, but again, it's hard for all of it to sink in. You need your writing to be more... striking. So events, information, and whatnot stays longer with the reader. Like how Psyver treated Raih... ::snickers::... now that scene, i just pulled off the top of my head. Nicely done btw. Didn't know they were... passionate. And you used the name Seiji? Gee... i wonder... J/k. But then again, this is all my opinion. Write the way that best suits you. But improvement is always a plus.