for Kazra Inar8/29/2006 c1 
1Magnolian Wolf
OMG this is good. This is really good.
I love the original names you give your characters.
I love your description.
I love your story. Simple, and yet compelling.
1Magnolian WolfOMG this is good. This is really good.
I love the original names you give your characters.
I love your description.
I love your story. Simple, and yet compelling.
1/9/2004 c3 Writerofascientist
Aren't you going to continue? I like this a lot and would love to read more!
Aren't you going to continue? I like this a lot and would love to read more!
7/16/2003 c8 Sheeba
Oh! Action. I love this story. I wonder what those men want with her? I can't wait to find out! Update soon girl! :)
Oh! Action. I love this story. I wonder what those men want with her? I can't wait to find out! Update soon girl! :)
6/28/2003 c7 Sheeba
OMG! That was so sad! I love stories where fathers are shown as great lovers of their children. What an insane mother. I love this. I especially love journeys in new places, particularly those from the minds of others. It is amazing how detailed your work is and I can actually visualize everything. I really like Kalen and Benia's new forming relationship! I'm glad she has some sort of father-figure. And I like the name Bruin. It sounds really nice when I say it out loud. (I know I'm wierd. lol) Keep it up! This is getting very good! ^_^
OMG! That was so sad! I love stories where fathers are shown as great lovers of their children. What an insane mother. I love this. I especially love journeys in new places, particularly those from the minds of others. It is amazing how detailed your work is and I can actually visualize everything. I really like Kalen and Benia's new forming relationship! I'm glad she has some sort of father-figure. And I like the name Bruin. It sounds really nice when I say it out loud. (I know I'm wierd. lol) Keep it up! This is getting very good! ^_^
6/26/2003 c6 Sheeba
AH! Cliffhanger! Why did you do that to me! Just when I get into it too! lol. Update soon! I love it so far! :)
AH! Cliffhanger! Why did you do that to me! Just when I get into it too! lol. Update soon! I love it so far! :)
6/22/2003 c4 Sheeba
Another superb chapter! I wonder where they are going now? I can't wait to see if she meets her twin soon! Update plz! :)
Another superb chapter! I wonder where they are going now? I can't wait to see if she meets her twin soon! Update plz! :)
6/21/2003 c3 3naughty little munchkin
oh, i like those two last words of this chapter...'liquid shadow'... sounds so elusive and silky. i like it! but if u sorta...well, come across those exact same words in one of my stories... please tell me and i'll get rid of them :) lol! i wudn't want to be taking away all u're bright ideas!
n e way, nice bits of information u've chosen to give us here - not too little yet just enuf to keep all u're dying fans intrigued and wondering what on earth is gonna happen next! nice job on that.
Benia's character is nicely developing... becoming 'conscious' as my literature teacher would say! lol! (this is good practice... we have a SAC next week on doing a review of a review... don't ask me! i don't know n e thing about it!)
n e way, next week i'm on holidays so hopefully i'll be able to come back on here much more frequently and R&R u're other stuff. getting n e where with 'spider'?
well, congratulations on a wonderful 3-chapter start to a story that has a lot of potential! great job!
lotsa luv, u're dying fan` nadia :P
3naughty little munchkinoh, i like those two last words of this chapter...'liquid shadow'... sounds so elusive and silky. i like it! but if u sorta...well, come across those exact same words in one of my stories... please tell me and i'll get rid of them :) lol! i wudn't want to be taking away all u're bright ideas!
n e way, nice bits of information u've chosen to give us here - not too little yet just enuf to keep all u're dying fans intrigued and wondering what on earth is gonna happen next! nice job on that.
Benia's character is nicely developing... becoming 'conscious' as my literature teacher would say! lol! (this is good practice... we have a SAC next week on doing a review of a review... don't ask me! i don't know n e thing about it!)
n e way, next week i'm on holidays so hopefully i'll be able to come back on here much more frequently and R&R u're other stuff. getting n e where with 'spider'?
well, congratulations on a wonderful 3-chapter start to a story that has a lot of potential! great job!
lotsa luv, u're dying fan` nadia :P
6/21/2003 c2 naughty little munchkin
yep! another fantastic chapter! need i say n e more? lol! but there was just one thing down near the end. Moloven sed that they had to send THREE more students to serve the Ring... but they only picked 2. was that intended or a minor mistake? but yeah, that was the only thing i managed to pick up! also, but selecting 2 more students before Benia mite do wonders in increasing the tension and suspense. but that's just a suggestion. feel free to ignore!
u r such an awesome writer! very fluent in expression, words and descriptions... also very controlled too, unlike others who seem to jump everywhere and all over the place! yep, just keep on doing what u're doing and u have my support!
well done!
lotsa luv, nadia :P
yep! another fantastic chapter! need i say n e more? lol! but there was just one thing down near the end. Moloven sed that they had to send THREE more students to serve the Ring... but they only picked 2. was that intended or a minor mistake? but yeah, that was the only thing i managed to pick up! also, but selecting 2 more students before Benia mite do wonders in increasing the tension and suspense. but that's just a suggestion. feel free to ignore!
u r such an awesome writer! very fluent in expression, words and descriptions... also very controlled too, unlike others who seem to jump everywhere and all over the place! yep, just keep on doing what u're doing and u have my support!
well done!
lotsa luv, nadia :P
6/21/2003 c1 naughty little munchkin
hey ember! its me!
lol! guess what? i just clicked on the fantasy category and what do i see? u're fantastic story in the very first slot! lol! so obviously i just had to click on it, read it again and post a glowing review for the whole world to see!
n e way, i'm sure u already know my opinions on it, but other ppl don't so i'll just drag on, singing in endless (and mindless) praise :P
absolutely fantastic beginning. short sharp and straight to the point, but u still manage to capture the desperate emotion of the character Sithlar and the utter disbelief of those that found him. now, if i hadn't read this before, i'd be saying i'm dying to know what happens next :) (but the part i'm actually up to still does this to me n e way lol)
ah well, will keep reading and reviewing... but sadly i think the reviews will get a tad shorter... otherwise i'd just be sounding too repetitive and u'll get sick of me (but as if n e 1 could get sick of genuine praise?)
n e way, great job and keep up the fantastic work!
lotsa luv, nadia :P
ps - i promise u'll hear from me soon. i haven't yet forgotten u (no matter how nuts u are :P )
hey ember! its me!
lol! guess what? i just clicked on the fantasy category and what do i see? u're fantastic story in the very first slot! lol! so obviously i just had to click on it, read it again and post a glowing review for the whole world to see!
n e way, i'm sure u already know my opinions on it, but other ppl don't so i'll just drag on, singing in endless (and mindless) praise :P
absolutely fantastic beginning. short sharp and straight to the point, but u still manage to capture the desperate emotion of the character Sithlar and the utter disbelief of those that found him. now, if i hadn't read this before, i'd be saying i'm dying to know what happens next :) (but the part i'm actually up to still does this to me n e way lol)
ah well, will keep reading and reviewing... but sadly i think the reviews will get a tad shorter... otherwise i'd just be sounding too repetitive and u'll get sick of me (but as if n e 1 could get sick of genuine praise?)
n e way, great job and keep up the fantastic work!
lotsa luv, nadia :P
ps - i promise u'll hear from me soon. i haven't yet forgotten u (no matter how nuts u are :P )
6/19/2003 c3 Sheeba
Okay...That was incredible. You have to update soon. I love the idea of the institute and I can't wait to find out what became of her twin brother! So hurry it up! ha ha! :)
Okay...That was incredible. You have to update soon. I love the idea of the institute and I can't wait to find out what became of her twin brother! So hurry it up! ha ha! :)
6/19/2003 c2 Sheeba
Oh...so the plot thickens! I wonder why Kalen is protecting Benia? And where is her twin? (I am presuming she is one of the children from the prologue). Maybe I'm wrong! hehehe...On to the next chapter! :)
Oh...so the plot thickens! I wonder why Kalen is protecting Benia? And where is her twin? (I am presuming she is one of the children from the prologue). Maybe I'm wrong! hehehe...On to the next chapter! :)
6/19/2003 c1 Sheeba
Hi! Awesome prologue! You write with such detail it feels like there's a movie running through my head! I can't wait to find out why the twins' mother is a danger to them! :)
Hi! Awesome prologue! You write with such detail it feels like there's a movie running through my head! I can't wait to find out why the twins' mother is a danger to them! :)
6/16/2003 c2 Raonaid Siofra
Took some time to review this..even though I should be writing an exercise for FWW6.. But URGH! can't get into it to do so.
As far as I see i don't find any errors {but I doubt I would}
I'm curious as to why Kalen is protective of Benia..unless you told me once. Bah my mind is going.
Took some time to review this..even though I should be writing an exercise for FWW6.. But URGH! can't get into it to do so.
As far as I see i don't find any errors {but I doubt I would}
I'm curious as to why Kalen is protective of Benia..unless you told me once. Bah my mind is going.