for Borrowed Wings7/4/2003 c1 
38Shadafakup
Good.. I liked the theme on "borrowed wings".. A rather deep matter explored here.. Meaningful.. Good descriptions and the endin was sad but so true.. Well written.. I liked it.. Its really interestin..
38ShadafakupGood.. I liked the theme on "borrowed wings".. A rather deep matter explored here.. Meaningful.. Good descriptions and the endin was sad but so true.. Well written.. I liked it.. Its really interestin..
4/10/2002 c1 12Mephisto Budoki
Mm. Nice Poem Imoto. I would try, if you want to use Rhyme, to maybe expirment with more complicated themes. Read "The Raven" a few times, try the Nested Rhyme. You might have fun. Lovely poem dear.
12Mephisto BudokiMm. Nice Poem Imoto. I would try, if you want to use Rhyme, to maybe expirment with more complicated themes. Read "The Raven" a few times, try the Nested Rhyme. You might have fun. Lovely poem dear.
4/10/2002 c1 doruukun
Interesting, I like it :) Experiment with your style, like, try using other rhyme schemes than rhyming couplets (they get old). Also, I think the word you're looking for is "earthly," not "earthy."
Interesting, I like it :) Experiment with your style, like, try using other rhyme schemes than rhyming couplets (they get old). Also, I think the word you're looking for is "earthly," not "earthy."
4/10/2002 c1 Rini
beautiful poem, I really like it. Keep writing I like how you write. Very good poem.
beautiful poem, I really like it. Keep writing I like how you write. Very good poem.